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Kaptagon
KaptagonLv146mth
2024-06-07 05:37

Soo.. yeah i bought privilage and read further novel chaps, you made some Info dump chaps dude and most people does not have "patience" to read through it BUT it is okay since you seem to be a new face in this business... Here is an advice about how to make better "Info dumps":you can distribute infos and write them part to part and integrate them to the story(this aldı adds some mystery but repetition of this method is a bad thing cuz it gets predictable and bores reader) rather than gibing Info in its bare form you can make us "feel" it through mcs pov( let MC explain it part bu part what he sees or feel of new continents structure for example, let him COOK) other than these, characters are still lacks some depth(as expected cuz story barely started) story needs some timekip and he needs to buy that physique thingy, if you make us wait too long it will lose its importance and that aspect will get boring. Update rate is great. Mc design is also good but needs improvement, we have seen some thoughts of MC about his past but no character developement(New continet ican be the reason of it) writing quality is good. Thats all for now, i shall return for a 3rd review once this novel is at chap 120+.

INFINITE MONEY - I Will Buy Everything

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Kaptagon
KaptagonLv14

normally writing quality is not GOOD, needs better portrayal of situations etc BUT you said you are a newbie so it would be unfair ti rate it below 5 star ( cuz i can see you are trying go improve).

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Darpan_Biswas
Darpan_BiswasAuthor

Thanks for your honest review man and about the stats dump I removed it from the future chapters so you don't need to worry about that and i will quickly try to change the scenery as possible while trying to make my writing quality better

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Pratik_
Pratik_Lv12

ya make it more refined my guy ...u got a good story there but the execution is not quite there

Darpan_Biswas:Thanks for your honest review man and about the stats dump I removed it from the future chapters so you don't need to worry about that and i will quickly try to change the scenery as possible while trying to make my writing quality better
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