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2024-04-11 09:09

_Elle's story has many strong points. The main character has enough imagination and forbearance to accept her situation quickly, and shows a willingness to both question and use the authority of those around her. World-building wise, there's a lot of groundwork laid and a lot of good potential as of 7 chapters in. The plot seems mostly character driven at this point in the story, and there's a lot of legwork that needs to be done to flesh out the budding relationships that are being presented. I'd certainly like to learn more about what each character has going on that isn't just dealing with each other, but as I recognize, it's still early. Weak points are mostly in the prose, which can be a bit unnecessarily long at times, and the odd errors in word use and punctuation. Overall however it is correct for English and a good editing run should iron out the technical issues.

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