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GeneralDeFartos_L
GeneralDeFartos_LLv49mth
2024-08-03 12:49

The storyline is fine, just somehow boring and not original. It could change later on, but I don't see it getting better. Lucas gets transmigrated into a sickly prince body, his father is an antagonist (don't know why) and his brother is a protagonist, and Lucas will die cuz sick. The writing is really the main reason I'm dropping. It's fancy but full of errors. Is this AI? Most likely. A lot of silly errors while the the writing in general is fancy. The errors are unbearable. I barely understand a thing when there's an error. Characters and even MC don't feel real, they are one dimensional at best. they feel like robots. Their interactions are robotic. The world is not explained, and there's no context for anything. Even if something was explained, the stupid writing errors make that part unreadable, so what's the point.

The Extra Wants To Live

Ink_Weaver122
4.0
299 Chs

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Dozer_2600
Dozer_2600Lv3

I have read the book up to chapter number 34. The book is great and I had fun reading it, although there are a few problems with it. The biggest one is the terrible grammar and the resulting confusion in the text, it makes it hard to read and you don't know what the author meant when writing a scene. The side characters are not one-dimensional and have their own stories, antipathies, preferences, etc. which makes the book more interesting. The progression of the plot is just right neither, too slow nor too fast. The world-building is slow, which I consider a positive because it is much better than the typical big info dump. The character development and skills of the main character are brilliantly portrayed, you can see that the MC is focused on survival and doesn't have time for any romance or the like. The bluntness of the updates is steady for which the author can be commended, as he does this despite the low power stone count. I wish a pleasant and peaceful day to those reading this comment. Good luck author don't drop this book Try to polish your skills on this book, especially grammar. (Ps. Maybe ask some English-speaking colleague for help

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Ink_Weaver122
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Post any questions you have in here but don't ask for spoilers please

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AuthorEriElegbede
AuthorEriElegbedeLv12

congratulations on winning Wpc. great work

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kylo_stekreo
kylo_stekreoLv4

This novel is really intriguing. There is not much to say yet because it's only starting to unfold but the author has done a remarkable job at piquing the interest of the reader

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Bunny_001
Bunny_001Lv13

Reveal spoiler

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Sikanu
SikanuLv1

I like this novel very much that's why I'm giving it a 5 Star. the novel has just started so there isn't much to say but I will review it again after novel has more chapters . keep it going author-san

1yr
Xtra_7
Xtra_7Lv4

you had a good idea but couldn't just write it well. the Grammer was not really good thats the main reason i dropped this novel it was just that unbearabl , u used a lot of fancy language a didn't write them well, sometimes I don't even know who is speaking. and why the hell do he recap like half a chapter back into the next. honest if I'm being real. I don't know how this novel won WCP. maybe type with a laptop next time

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Zoomtech
ZoomtechLv15

Half of each chapter is just copy and paste from the chapter before to “recap” it. It’s a good story but it’s wasting people’s coins

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DaoistcNdf0Q
DaoistcNdf0QLv2

Writing quality is just too horrible to read this. Chapters are very small and half of it is just reminiscent of the previous chapter.

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