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2024-05-09 23:19

Hello, review time. first of all i usually writte review, if i writte one, between 50-150 chapters not so early, but as i read authors notice of it will help hus story i will do so. as this story should have attention of readers, at least those who love football. so, i do in seriousness: writting quality: 5* - even if you can find there some grammar wrongdoings, they are so little or not so important that you will have any problem to understand story or it will not annoy you in any way. author even stopped using weeks to his aging, and puting only age there, so there are no more confusion, so i dont find needs to lower rating there. . Story development: 5* story is focused on football, which i consider right thing to do, mean there arent to many neccesary part pf story which would be usseless a little of slice of life there is is fine as its in good chemistry with the football part of story. even his girlfriend (not officialy yet) and his mon has some show up but not to much that it would postpone the story, which i find with great appreciation, so its all good. only note which i find a bit a pity is, POV of others persons. what i mean, for example commentator of matches are done well and trainers too, occasionaly spectators too, that is all well. but to side story for example there is mentioned clubs like chealsea, barca, real are curious about MC, well if its true, why not put some managers talk out there, or some club happening in backstage out of Izan knowing it, well just thats is my feeling, but overall story is developing in fine and good way, so thumbs up. btw you can even see author, how he is getting better, mb not in each chapter but when you see start of story and see ch.20+ for example i can see the developement of author himself (positively) well next. . Character design: 5*. Izan is good boy for me, he, he isnt stupid, but clever. but now what i found somehow surprised author put that he is good in study which i am surprised, not that those who do atletics ar edimb but doing top of class is rlly rare. but i dont mind it, as he as character rlly do things as smartass, he rlly upping his stats in overall way which is not bad to do, just i already mentioned in some comments, he should also focus on some stat where he will be original and one of the best in team, for example 30 percent of his point to give always to this stat (passing, dribling, avaranes whatever choosen) and 70 percent giving to his overall grow up, but thats just how i feel he should do, i am not author so whatever :D you will rlly like Izan anyway. other characters, well i think they are put there, and i dont feel like they have to small time of show up, by me its in optimal way. next up. . updating stability: for now i will give 5*, story is new and is updated rlly well i just hope author will keep it up a d dont drop it. . world background: 4* true be told, apart that its mentioned its post messi and ronaldo era, we dont know anything about happenings in the world at all, not that we need it right now, but i cant give full rate here, as there were a lot of great guys in football, and we dont even know if we see them in story as of now, even as a managers for example, Pavel Nedvฤ›d, star of Lazio, after Juventus who went do job for his club as manager in Juventus, i know i mention someone from my country but i put it as example, but story is in early stage mb we will see Manager Messi, Ronaldo, Cole or others in it in future. who know :D so thats only stat where i lower rating for story. . Overall story is great and even if author go premium, i plan to read it, and in my clear conscience i can recomend this story for reading. i personaly when i have 3 power stones rdy i always give 1 to this story alongside two others i rlly like to read curently. So thanks Author for your work, for story you showing up, and pleas dont drop it.

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i forgot to mention only one thing which i found strange, we know of Izans succes, all things written are about succes logicaly its fine and you want to see succesfull MC, but story would be good even if you see some hiw fails. mb fail of his 1 on 1 where his team get down by one goal after and in some way he excell in rest of match and win afterwards. just see some struggles of his too. but thats is just again my personal feelings which i forgot mention in review. thats all, and sorry for some grammars, i am bad writter on phone :D

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