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Bitty_kush
Bitty_kushLv155mth
2024-11-17 07:24

So far the mc has barely shown a depiction of pride he has been trying lay low until caught and while I like that he isn't one to make stupid decisions off one person saying something him letting people that clearly hate him benefit from him is stupid. The villian tag is blatantly wrong which personally isn't bad if you go in not expecting one. The story development isn't bad but I wish I knew more of what was going on at this point all I know is that he plans to abandon his family so he's not tied into that stuff why no clue from what I've read it seems he would benefit more from staying with them and it's hard to understand his pov if nothing is explained. Also it seems a big part of the story is them dying and starting over but so far I'm not sure if that's gonna happen.....

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Bitty_kush
Bitty_kushLv15

will come back after I get further to see if there are improvements

Original_Eternal
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i agree they earn more points if they do something major but mc is like i am gonna hide and not do anything major

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Salaciousness
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Einlion begins a new story once more. Past evidence shows that the probability of this story getting anywhere is unfortunately, abysmally small. Now about this story. I’m honestly baffled. Einlions stories for the past few years have just been a bombardment of “18+ scenes”, while skipping any sort of meaningful relationship build up leading to said scenes with the love interests. This is probably the main reason most of his readers were tired of him writing harems. Why would you want to read something that practically lacks a story because it’s bogged down by lemons with characters that had zero build up leading to them. What does this have to do with me being baffled? It’s because this story is apparently an attempt at writing something without a harem. Yet what does Einlion spend a large part of the story doing? He’s writing meaningful development between the mc and various female characters, giving these characters: interesting personalities, backgrounds, aspirations, oh and of course they all want to get with the MC. What does this mean? It means Einlion is finally writing what was missing in his latest stories, except since it’s not a harem there will never be any satisfying pay off. Am I saying the characters aren’t allowed to have depth if they won’t be love interests? Absolutely not, that would be amazing if only Einlion didn’t spend so much time describing how nearly every female character has a crush on the MC and how lucky they would be to get with him. Would this have to have been a harem for there to be a satisfying pay off? Nope, but it’s disheartening to see the MC have amazing chemistry with characters like Ohta, that could lead to really fun to read storylines that take place throughout the story over time and literal reincarnations instead of what we’ve gotten before in previous stories. “Nice to meet you! wanna bang? Sure!” Once again, I’m baffled. In Eins harem stories, he’d skip straight to the spicy scenes with no build up (Honestly I’m sick of lemons at this point). Now in his “non harem story”, he’s taking the time to build actual characters and their interactions with the MC, only to never do anything meaningful with them. Plot wise sure, he’s to die soon and will go to another world so it makes sense for the MC to not want to start anything. So why even have a large part of the story dedicated to how much everyone wants to get with the MC. Should have just not mentioned any romance at all from the beginning and instead keep everything platonic. Idk anymore, read it if you don’t mind reading a “no harem story” that has all the build up with multiple characters but know there will be nothing to come out of it in the end.

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