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2024-06-18 22:31

Overall, I like this story. Not fully 5/5 star because there are problem with sentence structures and name. Firstly, the sentence structure is somewhat separated due to line by line structure which is not a problem to other but to me, it is seems imcompleted due a whole sentence separated into different sentences. And secondly, the name has some problem on title and name structure. I saw some name like Lu daoist, Lu brother and other similar structures give me mind hemorrhoids. Please fix it into this format for english speaking audiences: title(daoist, elder, etc) then name.

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