It is a good read you just have to stop your brain at some points to get the idea behind some things the characters are not how people should be portrayed it’s more of an AI or a robot and they are all over to place one moment they are enemies and the next he is asking them out on dates with like 2-3 paragraphs. The power levels are all over the place like Thor is in the top 5 of the world and in this Odin tell that the mc can kill him when he is not even 9 or how mc can get powers from any anime and they are super powerful to the point they have to much already like he has (limitless,sunshine,shadow power from the shadow monarch,power of destruction,gravity and such) and he is all over the place in the ranks so in the end you don’t even know where his power stands and some people are not like they are betrayed in story’s or legends like Aries wants to kill mc because ‘he is a threat’ but the Aries I know about whould want to fight mc idk it is a good read but can be better
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thank you for your review and yes sometimes I use AI to correct my mistakes. I would evade these mistakes on my other fanfic so thank you.
No problem it was just that i think this fic has a good amount of potential to be good and if you can give a little more detail in how he trains his powers and how he talks to the people who he interacts with and the like it will be better and maybe put like the emotion of the character like. Theo thought in a angry and irritated tone ‘Why can’t I get my time powers to work on a room so I can use it like the hyperbolic time chamber.’ Or something like that
emir_adar:thank you for your review and yes sometimes I use AI to correct my mistakes. I would evade these mistakes on my other fanfic so thank you.
yes you are right but i can't so much detail because i have a life too. i make 19 chapter in 3 day is to much for me.
Madara6116:No problem it was just that i think this fic has a good amount of potential to be good and if you can give a little more detail in how he trains his powers and how he talks to the people who he interacts with and the like it will be better and maybe put like the emotion of the character like. Theo thought in a angry and irritated tone ‘Why can’t I get my time powers to work on a room so I can use it like the hyperbolic time chamber.’ Or something like that
That is understandable and I’m not saying to change what you are doing or not live your life I was just giving my thoughts and opinions on what whould make it a better fic and I wanna say don’t ever change just because someones opinion just keep doing what you have been doing and it will come along
emir_adar:yes you are right but i can't so much detail because i have a life too. i make 19 chapter in 3 day is to much for me.
I see so this is just your another one of your mass produced dxd fic where the mc is op beyond words has a Pokemon harem with girls falling for him left and right and everyone has negative iq to make mc look cool? Is that right?
At points yes but at others it is not its very fast-paced so far so at some point it will probably slow down maybe at the start of cannon or maybe at the start of slash dog( slash dog is a dxd universe anime around the time vail was like 13-15)
B6_12nn3:I see so this is just your another one of your mass produced dxd fic where the mc is op beyond words has a Pokemon harem with girls falling for him left and right and everyone has negative iq to make mc look cool? Is that right?
