Review Detail of Facez_ in Twins of Diamond and Pearl (Poke Fic)

i gotta say you got talent. now you just need to add colors

dude can you make a list of of pokemon fics in your profile?

i wouldn't mind but i dont read much pokemon FF since most of the time they're harem and it's very rare for me to find a single FL one .maybe my requirements are too high.🤔so i just gave up.

sure, when do you think you can finish it?

finished

thanks

The drawing itself is 10/10 but I can’t help but feel it doesn’t fit in Pokémon (to anime boy) while it does fit the author’s description of the mc ‘black hair, red eyes and white clothes’ it doesn’t really have any distinctive features that most gym leaders and above have. I’d say add a little more color to the clothes keep white as the main color but add some black and light blue as supporting colors ((just look at Cynthia mainly black with bit of silver and yellow) the black to help show there pseudo twin dynamic while the blue is a nod to his favorite Pokémon being shiny umbreon) I’d say tighten up the clothes and add a black collar to make his red eyes more prominent, light blue shoes and maybe a bracelet on one wrist and a black belt he keeps his poke balls on

When I say collar I’m talking about the shirt collar if you’re wondering think a cross between blues outfit and the white team rocket executive uniform