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Gorloww
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2024-05-18 04:45

While I believe this story has a lot of potential, author needs to stop repeating sentences and delaying the story. Also, please stop explaining every single detail about how everyone is going to behave if something "would" happen and instead just show us things actually happening. example: how the elders would behave if the MC killed a main branch character, like bro, we get it without you saying the hypothetical scenario, so stop delaying the story and get on with it.

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Please try out my friend's first work: *Supreme Warlock: New Order in the Apocalypse* It is a unique and interesting story with system and romance focus

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