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UnknownMonkey
UnknownMonkeyLv31mthUnknownMonkey

I don't usually write a review for fanfics but I have to write one with this fanfic to warn you people not to read this or they will experience brain rot. I will be completely honest with you this story is not well written and has many plot holes first the timeline does not make sense the Uchiha massacre should have happened when the MC was seven but it didn't Mc hasn't even entered the academy yet. Second, she's on team seven now that wouldn't be a problem if the team excluded someone from the og team seven but no the author decided to put MC on a four-man team with Naruto Sasuke, and Sakura. The worst part about this is that it could be completely avoided by giving Mc a private teacher that could have been a Huyga. I known its some authors might not want to create an oc but the author could have gotten Mc a private teacher that isn't an oc an example is Anko but no we got mc on a four man. The last problem with this story is that it feels like the author did not research anything about Naruto.

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Hinoka Hyuga

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SpaceKatss
SpaceKatssLv1SpaceKatss

Thank you

Nen_pin
Nen_pinAuthorNen_pin

Thanks for your review I'll try to improve.

UnknownMonkey
UnknownMonkeyLv3UnknownMonkey

pls do

Mann_Teufortian
Mann_TeufortianLv3Mann_Teufortian

I just got hit by a triple combo of cringe, incorrect lore, and dialogue written like a movie/theater script