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poison_testerrrrr2
poison_testerrrrr2Lv410mth
2024-06-02 18:15

The story has potential. But the writing (translation if tl) is really bad. The author/tl clearly does not understand when to use pronoun it/his/her. It's all mush up. Next one is the naming did the author/tl did not even try to fix it. Another thing is there are paragraphs that just the author thought he/she can try to be more mysterious but did not really able to work on. It will work if the grammar is okay but it's not. I really like the plot here but after dozens of chapters it doesn't even get fixed.

Mind and Magic

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155 Chs

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Tbh, the world building is pretty good, but the progression is slowed down by the excessive explaining and details. Not to mention that its really hard to tell whether im reading thoughts, or someone talking.

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SilverFox02
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It is a great fanfiction, actually it could be the best I read about HP. Especially the charachters and the world building are top notch and reallly fun to read. Thank you for the great story author!

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BarryBoneRaiser
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The grammar is abysmal and random unnecessary words are added. The names of places and characters are completely butchered and keep changing throughout the story, an example would be hogwarts, which alternates between hog, hoag, hogs and hogwarts. ‘It’ is commonly replaced with ‘she’ and the perspective keeps changing for no real reason. The only thing I enjoyed was the start where it was actually interesting.

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Meh.😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒

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kinshi
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great story. i really like this kind of approach. hope to see the main character dive deep into the school(talents) end develop some unique spells.

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Reveal spoiler

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Greet fanfic!

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too much nonsense and so much translation mistakes

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