Item: Mind and Magic
Rating: 3.6
Author: BarryBoneRaiser

BarryBoneRaiserLv48mth

2024-08-04 18:57

The grammar is abysmal and random unnecessary words are added. The names of places and characters are completely butchered and keep changing throughout the story, an example would be hogwarts, which alternates between hog, hoag, hogs and hogwarts. ‘It’ is commonly replaced with ‘she’ and the perspective keeps changing for no real reason. The only thing I enjoyed was the start where it was actually interesting.

Mind and Magic

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