Review Detail of codyleewanless in Shadow Monarch : Beyond the Journey's End
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The best way to describe your grammar is over explaining almost everything. You explain parts that aren't important. Here's an example: Jin-woo looked at the sun and he breathe heavily. What I would write: Jin-woo looked over his shoulder to the sky and took in a deep breath for control. The first example is explaining a scene in an instant, but you exaggarete that one topic over a few sentences. The second is a smoother experience to make readers imagine the moment but does not over focus.
GrandCaster:is my grammar that bad fk hahaha 💀💀
You will improve man and there is already a similar story like this, you should go check it out, if you haven’t already. although I haven’t read your story yet but I will when there are more chapters. Good luck!
GrandCaster:is my grammar that bad fk hahaha 💀💀
TOFIE:The best way to describe your grammar is over explaining almost everything. You explain parts that aren't important. Here's an example: Jin-woo looked at the sun and he breathe heavily. What I would write: Jin-woo looked over his shoulder to the sky and took in a deep breath for control. The first example is explaining a scene in an instant, but you exaggarete that one topic over a few sentences. The second is a smoother experience to make readers imagine the moment but does not over focus.
My thoughts for getting better is to practice speaking what you write. You don't need to simplify. Just write, read it through by mouth and then adjust to your liking.
GrandCaster:So my grammar is alrighr, but my writing style is over explanatory. Aight imma try to simplify it