[ Review from Chapter 1] Honestly I can't be bothered with the review anymore. I went through a lot of things to say for this one, but It was too long. I think the main character deserved the bullying and his sister being harrassed and his father getting fired and my reasons for it is simple. It's a light consequence for the things he did through out the chapter. If many people on this story is here for solo leveling or world traveling my honest opinion. Don't read chapter 1. The system and the shadow monarch abilities are used by a fragile 16 year old kid with a deformed sense of justice. If the writer wasn't so focused on his over focused sob story about the bullies it would have been a good story, but this entire chapter is just info dump about a 16 year olds bland revenge for being a bully victim. My advice for the writer. You shouldn't overfocus on serious events, why talk about killing someone when you use murder and kill to explain an entire scene. That's the problem you explain like a news report but not show us what he did. Don't take it to heart. I like solo leveling, but I'm not interested in this 16 year old bullshit.

You don't read your own story, if you did you will find out what I'm talking about. Go proof read and find out.

My thoughts for getting better is to practice speaking what you write. You don't need to simplify. Just write, read it through by mouth and then adjust to your liking.

1 miniute and 16 s for me and I wasn't speed running the chapter.

The best way to describe your grammar is over explaining almost everything. You explain parts that aren't important. Here's an example: Jin-woo looked at the sun and he breathe heavily. What I would write: Jin-woo looked over his shoulder to the sky and took in a deep breath for control. The first example is explaining a scene in an instant, but you exaggarete that one topic over a few sentences. The second is a smoother experience to make readers imagine the moment but does not over focus.

[ Review from Chapter 7] In my honest opinion, My reasons are simple. The abilities are the only unique thing that appears when writers decide to write a fanfiction, but nothing else changes. In that sense, expect there to be the average scenarios, the average solo leveling canon events and other than to have a protagonist that is a copy of Jin-woo under different circumstances. The story is not bad, because what I think about it does not matter, everyone has their own about it, but I will point out some infuriating things. - Extremely short chapters with meaningless words and conversations. - Copy paste canon events, but applied to a different character, but thats something a lot of people do on here, so it can be looked over, just not for me. - The entire content of all 7 chapters could be summed up in a few words. [ Mc enters world, Architect forces Mc, Mc agrees wakes up in canon event after dungeon.] But those points are dragged out across 7 short chapters and the rest is just monologues of shallow thought out characters expressing their unimportant thoughts to move a plot. I'm not invested, but I think I got catfished by the first part of the synposis and the second oh boy. What victory does the Mc get out of a solo leveling story? [...] He may know the peace of death but I know the chaos that is life. [ (o.0)] He may create armies even when in battle but I designed the battlefield.[ [(-.~)>] War cometh but Victory is mine.[ (',') Victory.) If you think war is a victory... Then yes you became the Architects pet. War? Victory? Maybe this would be victory if the chapters wasn't so plain and short.

How will the protagonist's attitude be in "Solo Leveling," knowing the story? Will he act as a monster affiliated with humans (because he should have the Architect's body) or will he hide among them? [CGPT Translation]

The chapter has been read through and slight parts were edited and fixed.

The scene of the Architect after being affected by the effects of The Black Tongue Of The Tragedian and Idle Baphomet.

The chapter will be released in a few hours from this comment, there will be mistakes, but I'm impatient to upload the chapter so like the others please don't mind my mistakes. I hate editing and an impatient writer. The story could be polished in grammar and certains scenes could be explored and character identites can be built on, but I feel that I just need to post it even if there are somethings wrong. I've been reading through and editing it for hours now and still i do not feel as if it's enough.

Sakura was the first cover photo for this story many months ago :)

Nah don't its a bot

Optional Rule before the First rule on a date with Ifeelawkwardgirl, Don't waste time with her :p Pay for that cheap date, Put that duel disk on and take out other people life points. Advice from a No Life, Working class people be cautioned.

These guys are fkn idiots. The moment he joined his patreon he up the monthly pay to 20 dollars per month dumbasses.

Giga chad? Where? Oh... The guy who keeps interacting with the girls who fucked over the main body. Just an average person playing a video game in VR more like it

Yeah it's NTR

Oh.. You did ooo... sorry I think your have dementia,because I was the one who did it. you see. I will explain. I went on a mtl site and I copy and pasted every chapter, word by word, so all that time copy and pasting amounts to my hard work as a CTRL C V and then I had this bright idea to make money, so I made two patreons all of them linked to the same bank and now I'm going to paste these chapters. And then one day I'm going to do it all over again, but under another name. Like what I did there I tried really really hard to type this... but you c, It's funny because you are a money scrub who made both Patreon accounts $20.00 dollars. Oh.. you really valued your writing skills there boy. Keeping grinding. I will wait until december to c the value of your hard work at bullshting but you know. Good ridance. It doesn't matter if you tell people you translated it. This is the best thing about reading. I look at your profile and then I see myself and say. Why don't I do the same. You know because it sounds funny :) Not because it makes money. It's just funny. that you have spent 22 days/1 chapter per day, with 0 income and the fact that even if you had made 1 patreon, pfft. You'd wait for 30 days for 9 bucks. AHAH that too me is very fucking funny. It just shows me how terrible you are at everything to do with time management and well this :) good luck though I'd probably come to message again in the future

:3 Oh, right do you mean copy and paste from mtl and post it in your patreon that sounds about right, why don't you go link about with a scam company they need people like you :)

I'm one to judge. I read his version and foxaholic and I came to the understanding that this guy copys and pastes, simple. You are not one to judge because your mental expands to only Webnovel.