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LT_Ryuu_XLv45mth
2024-08-27 11:03

He’s basically a slave to the old ones till chapter 23 then he became a genie to and then will become a slave again. At the beginning the writing quality is okay, when asked if he could use some type of app to help improve his grammar, he said no that the reason why it was bad was cuz there character was human so he would not think with perfect grammar. I said that stupid as we the readers should expect the right level of grammar and that the first couple of chapters need to bring the viewer in, and when you say no to constructive criticism it sends bad signals. Writing stability is okay, from last I read he posted 4 days ago witch is alright not the best where it’s one every day or every second day but I don’t know the specific time between the chapters The story development is again alright a very good concept and I love it as hoopa’s design is very cool but it could be a bit better. With him not being a slave(he has some freedom but can be controlled by the old ones and the whole point in the story was for him to get his freedom but when he did he is now a trapped genie). Like I said love the design of the character here so that’s really good. Not much to say, just that it’s using the old necron lore not the modern one. I like the book somewhat but it could be better, the aurther likes to make long monologues and it can get annoying a bit.

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Unpaid_FoxGodLv14

I find this hard to believe, especially when you point out his grammar, considering that yours is just horrendous.

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