It was good until the Multiverse stuff. Mc was kinda op in mha but it was some kind of a reasonable and had an interesting story. But, One blink and mc now had children that are protecting the universe and act so close with him. And suddenly a massive war is waged and he is the King. Honestly, the mha part and naruto part looks like they are written by different authors.
Liked it!
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you can skip the multiverse arc if you want , honestly it was a bit rushed and i decided to skim the process of selection of background but The arc is an introduction to the real aim of the story. anyways if you feel like returning know that the arc is over next chapter.
I know people don't like it I'm sorry for that
Its not that the idea was bad. Its the execution that is the problem. I honestly feel like the you could've streched the Multiverse and daughters part of the story for about 20-30 chapters if they are long enough before the war arc. But another problem is, you introduced the Multiverse consept too early on the story while we are yet to properly know the world you set. I think you Should re-write those parts and strech the mha world's story. Once you realise the story on the mha world's start to slow down with no action and readers start to get bored, then it would be a great idea to keep the readers entertained by introducing Multiverse. 👍
Vidhan_Bhardwaj:I know people don't like it I'm sorry for that
working on that now , won't promise great things but will work on the mistakes i made
The_Puffer:Its not that the idea was bad. Its the execution that is the problem. I honestly feel like the you could've streched the Multiverse and daughters part of the story for about 20-30 chapters if they are long enough before the war arc. But another problem is, you introduced the Multiverse consept too early on the story while we are yet to properly know the world you set. I think you Should re-write those parts and strech the mha world's story. Once you realise the story on the mha world's start to slow down with no action and readers start to get bored, then it would be a great idea to keep the readers entertained by introducing Multiverse. 👍
working on that now , won't promise great things but will work on the mistakes i made
The_Puffer:Its not that the idea was bad. Its the execution that is the problem. I honestly feel like the you could've streched the Multiverse and daughters part of the story for about 20-30 chapters if they are long enough before the war arc. But another problem is, you introduced the Multiverse consept too early on the story while we are yet to properly know the world you set. I think you Should re-write those parts and strech the mha world's story. Once you realise the story on the mha world's start to slow down with no action and readers start to get bored, then it would be a great idea to keep the readers entertained by introducing Multiverse. 👍
