It had an interesting premise but Lyra ended it all, why do you care about this girl? knowing that there are still humans, the strength he has should give him confidence to just walk around and find someone else but this girl is too boring. If the author doesn't delete this then, for those who get easily irritated by an annoying girl who keeps taking him away from the main objective of finding his family, then try reading up to the 15th chapter to give your. opinion and see if you like it.
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LIKEThis novel wasn't for me, I'm just not a fan of this type of initiative, if someone likes it, good luck.
thank you for this feedback 🙏 I'll try to work on the character better in the future, i hope it doesn't, or didn't affect Ur experience too much.
i understand. thank you for trying anyway ^_^
OtakuSad0:This novel wasn't for me, I'm just not a fan of this type of initiative, if someone likes it, good luck.
Seeing you being so nice, it makes me feel bad, sorry if I was rude I don't want to demotivate you, you must have your own fans who like it but sorry I'm not one of them. Have a good night and I hope you continue and if you want I can delete this comment as it really isn't constructive to improve the novel
DBM_Novelist_:i understand. thank you for trying anyway ^_^
no, no. you weren't rude at all, and believe me when I say, this particular comment might have been what i needed. if anything I'm truly greatfull for it. you gave my work a try before making this comment, and that's all that matters. it's not something you did blindly, and this has only helped to point out my flaws. as for wether I'll delete the comment, or not, i won't😂. there's a reason why reviews are dropped after all. let them come see it, see me make this comment as well: to those who see this, i can only promise to improve on my story and Characters for better immersion and experience after this. no one should feel hesitant to drop similar comments like this, highlighting my faults or inconsistencies, as long as they are guided sensible, without any rude or mindless commentary. there's not much i can do about the initial faults mentioned at this time this review is made, but i will definitely work on that aspect in the future chapters, so do feel free to stick around with me, through my inconsistencies, until then. I can only continue to do my best with all of your helps after all . and thank you again, really!^_^✌️
OtakuSad0:Seeing you being so nice, it makes me feel bad, sorry if I was rude I don't want to demotivate you, you must have your own fans who like it but sorry I'm not one of them. Have a good night and I hope you continue and if you want I can delete this comment as it really isn't constructive to improve the novel
damn , i wrote an entire epistle 🥲 -9999 aura🫠😂
DBM_Novelist_:no, no. you weren't rude at all, and believe me when I say, this particular comment might have been what i needed. if anything I'm truly greatfull for it. you gave my work a try before making this comment, and that's all that matters. it's not something you did blindly, and this has only helped to point out my flaws. as for wether I'll delete the comment, or not, i won't😂. there's a reason why reviews are dropped after all. let them come see it, see me make this comment as well: to those who see this, i can only promise to improve on my story and Characters for better immersion and experience after this. no one should feel hesitant to drop similar comments like this, highlighting my faults or inconsistencies, as long as they are guided sensible, without any rude or mindless commentary. there's not much i can do about the initial faults mentioned at this time this review is made, but i will definitely work on that aspect in the future chapters, so do feel free to stick around with me, through my inconsistencies, until then. I can only continue to do my best with all of your helps after all . and thank you again, really!^_^✌️
You're welcome, I wish you all the best, it must be difficult to plan the entire direction of the novel, I'll leave the book in the library and try again later, good luck author and never give up
DBM_Novelist_:no, no. you weren't rude at all, and believe me when I say, this particular comment might have been what i needed. if anything I'm truly greatfull for it. you gave my work a try before making this comment, and that's all that matters. it's not something you did blindly, and this has only helped to point out my flaws. as for wether I'll delete the comment, or not, i won't😂. there's a reason why reviews are dropped after all. let them come see it, see me make this comment as well: to those who see this, i can only promise to improve on my story and Characters for better immersion and experience after this. no one should feel hesitant to drop similar comments like this, highlighting my faults or inconsistencies, as long as they are guided sensible, without any rude or mindless commentary. there's not much i can do about the initial faults mentioned at this time this review is made, but i will definitely work on that aspect in the future chapters, so do feel free to stick around with me, through my inconsistencies, until then. I can only continue to do my best with all of your helps after all . and thank you again, really!^_^✌️
kkkkkkk, I felt good knowing that I didn't hurt you or anything after all it must be hard work to plan and review everything you do in this novel
DBM_Novelist_:damn , i wrote an entire epistle 🥲 -9999 aura🫠😂
thank you so much!
OtakuSad0:You're welcome, I wish you all the best, it must be difficult to plan the entire direction of the novel, I'll leave the book in the library and try again later, good luck author and never give up
i appreciate the thought. thank you
OtakuSad0:kkkkkkk, I felt good knowing that I didn't hurt you or anything after all it must be hard work to plan and review everything you do in this novel
Reintroduce tyla or Sonia as the new female lead
DBM_Novelist_:i appreciate the thought. thank you
Tyla will be reintroduced by, but Sonia is literally his cousin or niece. i have plans for a different character that I'm about to introduce soon however. but i can't make any certain promises, as the plot may change along the way.
DaoistuK3Ovv:Reintroduce tyla or Sonia as the new female lead
Can you introduce someone from the wall as the new Fl someone like a famous knight or something I just need someone other than Lyra. Tyla’s an outsider so I don’t think it’ll workout all that well since the main story is in Allan fort
DBM_Novelist_:Tyla will be reintroduced by, but Sonia is literally his cousin or niece. i have plans for a different character that I'm about to introduce soon however. but i can't make any certain promises, as the plot may change along the way.
Even if she gets better I don’t think I can forgive her my image and perception of her is already skewed (first impressions are everything)so I need a new fl pls P.s story’s good by the way
DBM_Novelist_:Tyla will be reintroduced by, but Sonia is literally his cousin or niece. i have plans for a different character that I'm about to introduce soon however. but i can't make any certain promises, as the plot may change along the way.
yes, there's a new FL from the Fort I'll be introducing soon. I liked Tyla, but yh, it'll prolly never work
DaoistuK3Ovv:Can you introduce someone from the wall as the new Fl someone like a famous knight or something I just need someone other than Lyra. Tyla’s an outsider so I don’t think it’ll workout all that well since the main story is in Allan fort
thank you:-) and for giving it another chance too.
I just wanna make sure but he isn’t going to the ward to go to the academy for a few years then go meet his brother right cuss that would be pointless
