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daniele_visani
daniele_visaniLv17mth
2024-09-22 06:11

Author, do the world a favor and dip your writing hand in the meat grinder. The only positive thing I can say about your story is that at least it seems like you studied grammar.

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Destiny_henry_1762
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don't be mean, you don't have to read the novel. it doesn't take a lot to be kind and give a more helpful feedback

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Patriarchleechlord
PatriarchleechlordLv14

TLDR: if you played basketball or an actual fan of the sport I don't recommend this novel author lacks basic knowledge of the sport and it is noticeable as early as chapter 15 when author tried writing a 3v3 match and MC made a variant of the traveling violation called up and down but didn't get called on it they simply continued play like nothing happened. Author tried to describe the MC as a theoretical player but couldn't play cause of his disability this would have been fine if the author knows a lot about basketball sadly author is a complete noob and probably never played a single game of basketball their entire life. My proof on chapter 15 MC did a violation known as up and down basically a traveling violation MC jumped with the ball on his hand trying to dunk but due to his lack of experience misjudged his jump and fell short this would have been fine if the MC's team immediately lost possession of the ball giving it to the other team but nope author just continued the play like nothing happened. This is unbelievable since the MC himself should know the basic rules if he was such a fan of the game and had theoretic knowledge of it then his opponents also played basketball previously and should know the rules they should have called the MC out and taken possession of the ball but none of that happened instead both sides acted like the most basic and fundamental rule doesn't exist Traveling is as basic as Football's/Soccer's no hands touching the ball rule. This is not a basketball story merely a slice of life with a fantasy system and an outsider's incorrect knowledge of basketball. There are probably more mistakes after that but I didn't continue past that chapter. Author should do a much more thorough research of the sport if they lack the first hand experience of playing the actual game since their Basketball matches would never even get close to believable because of fundamental flaws to the game's rules.

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