Review Detail of Alan_Grimlord in System Beautiful Life

Item: System Beautiful Life
Rating: 4

Review detail

Alan_GrimlordLv33mthAlan_Grimlord

the Begging was honestly quite good but at the same time i kinda wish that you gave the husband and wife a name earlier on its still good though also the level of detail is quite good

System Beautiful Life

Imortal_Sleep

Liked by 1 people

Replies2

Alan_GrimlordLv3Alan_Grimlord

Good job super star i hope your work improves

Imortal_Sleep:Thanks for the encouragement, I actually left his parents unnamed in the post moment. I'm going to let the reader know the parents' names at the same time as the protagonist to have a sense of secrecy and suspense and not be omniscient at all. Their names will also have a great impact on the work.

3mth

Imortal_SleepAuthorImortal_Sleep

Thanks for the encouragement, I actually left his parents unnamed in the post moment. I'm going to let the reader know the parents' names at the same time as the protagonist to have a sense of secrecy and suspense and not be omniscient at all. Their names will also have a great impact on the work.

3mth