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HeikyZX
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2024-09-25 05:37

It had everything to flow nicely in the first chapters but the author chapter after chapter ruined that potential. The MC got OP too fast and too easy, to the point that for the events/fights to last more than a handful of paragraphs, the author used and abused the system's quests to force the MC to do things without his Quirk (wow, how fun, yay). The author also shows absolutely ZERO interest in writing anything that isn't the MC acquiring new and random powers, how great/smart the MC is as he can defeat others without his Quirk, and... that is, I guess. Talks between the characters are rare, as the MC is VERY antisocial and apathetic to everything that isn't himself and his quests (yeah, he values them more than his own life, duh). Then there's the obvious plot armor as the MC will always win or clean the quest even if handicapped or acting without plans. Conclusion: the author wanted to write an MHA fic with an OP and MC that knows no failure, and it is that.

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kamidemond
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I have to agree on that one, I am not that good at managing the power level of the MC or progressing story line, I will fix that in my next fics

HeikyZX
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As advice, from what I have learned from reading fics, it is best for you to grab the power scale from top to bottom. For MHA, it would be Peak All Might, Star and Stripe, and Peak AFO - they are the presented 'peak powerhouses', then you slowly descend, and try to fit the MC's power and growth-speed to match the challenges. This is, of course, if you want to make something other than a one-sided 'face-slapping' fight kk. A good example and reference for OP MC with some challenging fights is 'MHA: Horizon(Ope-Ope No Mi)'.

kamidemond:I have to agree on that one, I am not that good at managing the power level of the MC or progressing story line, I will fix that in my next fics
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