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2024-01-28 08:13

I really like the story, very interesting but the chapters are so short! please author it's torture waiting 😂

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why do like the fanfic it's pretty average

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the story is pretty average , at least compared to other fanfics I have read , my problem with the author which I Am worried might be a problem later , it doesn't take genius to figure out that author is either some who watched Naruto , but i was a long time since he last watched the anime or he didn't pay attention to any of dialogue in Naruto and only focused on jutsu and fights or he someone who didnt watch anime and only created this fanfic for click bait and is writing this fanfic using google , wiki and youtube reels , there so much mistakes in this:firstly gaara's absolute defence was created from gaara's mother will to protect gaara from harm not his connection to shukaku or gaara strength , gaara absolute defence was even strong enough protect him from trained ninja as a child , Secondly gaara kekkei genkai isn't the thing that allows him to control sand , its the fact that he is the one tails jinchuriki is the thing that allows to control sand , gaara kekkai genkai just allows him to increase the density of his sand nothing else and b4 u ask why gaara was still able to control sand even after shukaku left , it's bc when shukaku was removed he gave gifted or blessed gaara with ability to control sand , fun fact gaara only started to use his kekkai genkai after his fight with the re animated rasa Thirdly, rasa only set assassins on gaara when he realized gaara couldn't control shukaku and he became a potential danger or risk to village . since your mc doesn't have any problems with shukaku or shown any indication his a risk to village , there shouldn't be any assassins after him , unless they are from another village Fourthly rasa never planned on making gaara kazekage ,he just wanted gaara to be a weapon for the village that's it , it was the idea of the village elders to make gaara kaze kage so they could control him , gaara had decided by himself he wanted to kazekage bc of his relationship with naruto , rasa never wanted gaara to be kazekage , the notion that rasa held no love for gaara is false , he cares for gaara , he just puts the safety village first b4 gaara , only sent assassins after gaara bc his he was becoming a threat to the village ,it was even shown in the fourth great Shinobi war where gaara forgave his father and his father felt sorry for everything he did to gaara at the end of conversation gaara finally used his kekkai genkai received from father after he forgave him . I think that's it . my first problem with writing the mc personality is weird , he little or no personality , the interactions feel a little bit forced it doesn't flow smoothly your writing style is average doesn't flow as smoothly as it should One of my biggest problem is mc is following i need to learn every single thing troup ,it ruins the uniqueness of naruto , were every single main character has their own signature jutsu and how those signature jutsu interact with one each other which makes fights interesting , kakashi is capable of using kenjustsu and a thousand justu but he prefers to use only raikiri , itachi can use kenjutsu , ninjutsu etc but prefers to use mainly sharingan genjutsu and shirukenjutsu , only using ninjutsu and taijutsu somtimes , Naruto can use all 7 chakra natures but mostly uses rasengan , shadow clones and rasenshuriken etc u even from logical stand point u knowing how to do everything wont make u the strongest it will make u a master of none the mc supposed to looking for things which suits his fighting style the most then master then master them b4 trying anything new , if I was the mc i would focus on learning ninjutsu and taijutsu , i wouldnt bother kenjutsu , genjutsu or medical jutsu , u know why kenjutsu wont benefit u bc u hav gourd on your back and limits your movements medical ninjutsu , bro is jinchuriki he has healing factor and doesn't need medical ninjutsu it's a waste of time , u will just make the fights boring ,instead have him concentrate only on ninjutsu and taijutsu ninjutsu to deal with long range fighters and taijutsu to deal with ppl if they might get close enough to take it back into a long range fight , u are a jinchuriki u shouldn't be afraid of spamming jutsu, after learning all the ninjutsu i need i would take inspiration from other character that can control sand it would make the fights more interesting, Hopefully u take my advice , the way I see this fanfic the only ppl who would enjoy this are ppl who are noobs when it comes to reading fanfics or ppl who are bored and waiting for their favorite fan fics to update and trying to pass the time , if i were u i would rewrite this and plan ahead

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