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Nightsking
NightskingLv111mth
2024-01-25 01:30

Since I can't be a ghost reader for a chapter I will give some feedback. Great story so far with a really interesting concept. Wouldn't have thought of it before except that I saw another story with the same concept only with modded minecraft and written less in my taste. Like the structure of your chapters are great with both describtions and what he is doing in good proportions maybe a bit more interactions, but that will also come late probably. Also great pacing so far. Maybe a thing that you could add is pictures of the buildings he build and things like that. I am curious how a wither would look and if he builds a beacon when he starts building his own city.

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And of course verry curious how he would act with other characters. With that I also have a question will there be large time skips so he interacts more in the game of thrones series era and he is just now estabilishing his strenght so that he has enough time to grow before interactions, or more in the era in which he now finds himself and would be more fast paced in growing.

Marcia_05
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Yes, there will be time jumps, not that big, but enough to move the story forward, only that they will be later, since now the focus is on introducing the mc to the world of asoiaf, at the same time that it grows in strength.

Nightsking:And of course verry curious how he would act with other characters. With that I also have a question will there be large time skips so he interacts more in the game of thrones series era and he is just now estabilishing his strenght so that he has enough time to grow before interactions, or more in the era in which he now finds himself and would be more fast paced in growing.
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