Hello there I am writing this as I have just read all of shadow slave and guess what the #1 in fanfic was a SS fic so I got motivated while thinking about what will happen if a character has the power to kill and make an army of dark souls bosses will anyone survive in ss universes how many can slave knight gale can kill and all I won't promise that I will keep writing but it was a fun concept I had in my mind I hope this time I reach 50 chapters that's the goal right now
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The biggest recommendation I can give you for improvement (if you want to write better) is to include dialogue. Right now, your main character has not talked at all. Everything is monologue and time-skippish. “Show, don’t tell” is what I think you can improve on (if you want to improve, you could be writing this for fun and nothing else and that’s okay)
You are right I am working on that this is why my brain stops working on dialogs and I want to keep it as original to source as possible so I have to think what would sunny from the start of the novel will react to him And it's gonna happen I am writing now I know it's bugging me to that there is not any Dialog
Kais_Imperium:The biggest recommendation I can give you for improvement (if you want to write better) is to include dialogue. Right now, your main character has not talked at all. Everything is monologue and time-skippish. “Show, don’t tell” is what I think you can improve on (if you want to improve, you could be writing this for fun and nothing else and that’s okay)
good concept
How many chapter do you have planned for this fic?
Kais_Imperium:The biggest recommendation I can give you for improvement (if you want to write better) is to include dialogue. Right now, your main character has not talked at all. Everything is monologue and time-skippish. “Show, don’t tell” is what I think you can improve on (if you want to improve, you could be writing this for fun and nothing else and that’s okay)
