Otaku_Gamer_00007

sorry it's AI I have tried using AI to write Fanfics to and i can tell it's very repetitive the Characters have no soul he Does not even interact with the characters and they act so one Dimensional he got to strong to quick to early and no one questions him bro even if you are just promoting why not read the story and make plot changes yourself I have tried with AI and you can do better with it then this

Bulma is the same girl that punched God of Destruction she is same girl Showing ass to a old pervert at the start to get the Dragon Balls she is the same girl Dated Yamcha the girl that liked the thrill the adventure the same girl who was a hopeless romantic looking for a Bad boy she is never robotic nither is Chi-Chi the girl that gets angry every five second the Stubborn protective wife that will also will not let Gohan train even tho he has the most potential so i Dont get where this Misconstrued logic of stoic , robotic always saying numbers girl comes from

well it's your story write how you like but sometimes it's not about you it's about the story and what will be entertaining a conflict is always more fun then easy relationship it could not have been enemy's or something but a little harder to get relationship the relationship that's Developing feel way to convinent and easy going like she is made to be his wife because he has gokus and vegetas memories that are influencing him in someway it's not his own entire personality of the guy who is reincarnated maybe he liked Cute Clumsy girl or a Fiesty girl or a girl that's just not tailor made for him the relationship is built in 5 chapters no Drama well DBZ is not exactly a Romance show but if you are writing the relationship part then maybe Don't focus to much on it then or write something interesting not saying I hate it just saying to fast for my taste to convinent

it maybe not be NTR but kinda robotic just read this out loud when Chema was created and how she talks and much easier solution would have been to just ask the Dragon to erase the memories he Does not want plus he feels to much like a DBZ character then a person who is reincarnated maybe insted of chima it was someone else like on of the other girls in the show someone intresting and someone who will have conflict at start not compatible but over time they like each other

it's a "FAN"FIC DUDE

if it's Bad why Do it even just go and make some money

wait partian is like one of the best weapons i have played elden ring for 1000 hours + and have tested every weapon

the problem with your fic is characters talk to much or in a way that Does not fit there character from lore

Born with small pps

it's not the worst shit in the world but he is superman he does not need to Deal with this Agents shit and be there Dog for no reason bro can just walk in and steal the infinity gauntlet in front of everyone if he wants to and the relationship was so stupid it makes no sense bro did not even go on a Solo Date with a Girl and they Slept together the same Day let's say ok but to just Go around spending money on her bro it's the 2nd Day like what make it make sense 😂 like bro if MC have no problem whatever why is the girl is like that and what's with random encounter to wife in one Day like come on man this is so stupid