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2024-01-17 13:47

Very cool story. It might be a bit early to definitively rank everything, but I certainly like where it is going. The quality is fantastic, and I can really feel the world at work around the characters. I just have some recommendations from a fellow author. 1. Synopsis! It's actually one of the most important aspects of a novel. I'd heavily recommended adding one. 2. Your update speed isn't bad but webnovel usually prefers more chapters that are a bit smaller. You definitely don't have to, this is just some advice, but maybe break up some of the longer chaps into shorter ones.

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The story is written well, though it only has 2 chapters, I can say that this story has potential. I hope the author continue writing! keep up the good work

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Still in the first few pages so I can't say much about the story yet. But the writing is good!

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The chapters are long enough and are written well. There's no confusion with the transition or the pacing. It goes well with the narrative. The author has made a good story. I will keep this story in my library to see how this story go. I am excited to see the next chapters. Thank you for introducing this wonderful work. Wish you best in your writing!

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