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edu_rodeiro
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2024-02-16 14:21

it has potential and concept of the mc is nice. having two MCs is also refreshing unfortunately the end of the first volume is a bit of forced plot and was executed poorly

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Adamus_Auguste
Adamus_AugusteAuthor

Hello, thanks for the review. I'm glad you like the MCs, but saddened by your disappointment with the conclusion of the first book. I'll do my best to make the second book an even more enjoyable experience for you and hope its ending will be satisfactory enough.

Adamus_Auguste
Adamus_AugusteAuthor

I'll revise the earlier chapters now that I have more experience and confidence. I hope you'll like the result once I'm done. Ps: The story won't fundamentally change, but the scenes will be better described, and the writing much easier to follow

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I_comitted_arson
I_comitted_arsonLv15

I just finished the story until now(376) and i must say, while its not the best writing I‘ve ever seen its still way better than a lot of things I‘ve seen before. The story though is really and i mean REALLY entertaing, while not having any mindblowing plottwists, its a really coherent and well done story, I especially like the fighting scenes, as they’re really fun to read and make sense, with that im implying there’s realism in this novel, something rarely seen.sometimes though there are certain parts, while not often, exist that I had to read twice to really understand whats happening but they‘re rarely seen and dont disrupt the flow of the story at all. The characters are well written and while not perfectly done act understandably and they gave actual personalities, Including the villains, they all have an actual goal and are not mere plot convenience in the story to make the mc stronger, they‘re actual living beings. The world building is very good though, with the rankings, backround of the world, new realms etc. etc. it forms a nice world for the mc and his group to explore. What I also like though are the neat little details like the battle monster club, something that makes sense since children want to have fun, them actually having to capture the monsters form a drive for those kids to explore and makes each deck unique in its own way and with the magical technology they have it‘s something that makes actual sense to appear in this world. The story progresses quite nicely and doesn‘t linger on one aspect like a simple training schedule for like 10 chapters, l dont really know abaout ipdate stabilty since i binge read the whole thing in like 2 days im just gonna give it 4 stars. All In all its a really enjoyable story which kept me reading for hours on end and dismissing all my studies, procrastination at its finest. I also spent 40 thousand points on popularity for the presumable fl of the story, if we‘re already there, when will she come back??

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