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Eroyama91
Eroyama91Lv1310mth
2024-04-05 05:41

I really liked the premise of this novel, and the first ten chapters were interesting, but from there it's been 40+ chapters of ONE scene. And there's barely anything happening. The kinky role-playing felt really weird and came out of nowhere. I really hoped to see more development and exploring the world, setting and characters by this point, but by chapter 57 it's only been like an hour or something in the story since the MC arrived in that world. This is honestly too slow for me, and doesn't feel like something I would pay to unlock more.

God of Milfs: The Gods Request Me To Make a Milf Harem

AGodAmongMen
4.2
534 Chs

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System_Department
System_DepartmentLv3

I read your review and I understand your pain bro. Check out the works Young Master System: My Mother Is The Matriarch or Supervillain Idol System: My Sidekick Is A Yandere. I’m not the author but the editor and moderator and I can say they are above average. So give them a try.

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prashant_dasari
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Author, I curse you to complete this beautiful novel and write many more like this or else[img=proud]

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HC_Pwnography
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It's just really bad. painfully slow. like coma inducing slow. avoid this.

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Gx23
Gx23Lv3

This novel is way too slow paced it took 120 chapters just to finish the interaction with his mom. For no reason at all did it need to be for that long. I’m sorry and for that I have to take my leave, even though the setting and plot is exactly what I like

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AGodAmongMen
AGodAmongMenAuthor

The story will be slow placed without any forced interactions, so don't expect lemons the moment the MC lays his eyes upon a girl. But in exchange for that, the 18+ scenes will be long thoroughly described and will feel unique and non-basic. This is the tenth review for this story, so I had to make a review to get a rating. But if you have any doubts about the story let me know below

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Alex_Rodri
Alex_RodriLv12

One scene is taking more than 40 chapters

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Alibi_Lullaby
Alibi_LullabyLv4

Love the world setting love the idea. but hate the execution. it feels like an Ecchi anime with the author teasing us with slow development every chapter but not giving us release. I'm all in if you wanna make good plot but spending an entire chapter on what was essentially 5 sec irl time of the protagonist having a passing thought or a character thinking/reminiscing about something is making me wanna let it stockpile chapters till the H-scenes start. I'm mostly ranting cuz your other novel had a similar problem. you write a hot scene with amazing description that seems to lead into something more but instead blow it off with the characters just talking to each other and then leaving like you didn't describe an almsot seggs scene 5 seconds ago.It has potential, I'm just waiting to see it.

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DrakeDaDragon
DrakeDaDragonLv15

The pacing of this story is slow. Like unbelievably slow. A simple interaction that should be done in 1 chapter, 2 at the most, gets spread to 5 or 10 chapters. Run on sentences take up the majority of this book, and the same stuff keeps getting repeated over and over. Author, you need to cut down on the characters constantly repeating what each other says in disbelief cuz that gets tiring real quick. Also the ideas you're trying to convey can be condensed a lot. So much unnecessary writing that the plot has barely gotten anywhere after 300 chapters.

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iiuminox
iiuminoxLv4

Tbh story it ain’t even that bad in general but how does the meat riding happen before the actual meat ride begins😭 Legit Yip Yap and Legendary D, Yop was present everywhere in this story with how they kept rambling and 🥩🚴 the MC💀

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