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2024-01-22 15:28

I have had the pleasure of reading many HP Book; Good and Bad with different tropes and mc reincarnating into James Potter is a rare one. So Kudos to the author for that. And i liked the story as well the only thing it's lacking is a good flow of conversation. Right now it feels too mechanical to me not much emotion in sentences it's not very engaging even though the content is very good.So I hope you get better at writing make this a good fic. And i also hope that you won't drop this fic and continue till its completion.All the best

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Thanks for the review. I will try to improve the conversations. When you say it is mechanical, do you mean the dialogues themselves or because of the words used in them? Referring to very old fashioned words. I ask because English is not my first language, and I use a translator to help me translate the chapters.

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i meant the dialogues it felt like computer generated now that you told me you use translator i can see why

Nathe07:Thanks for the review. I will try to improve the conversations. When you say it is mechanical, do you mean the dialogues themselves or because of the words used in them? Referring to very old fashioned words. I ask because English is not my first language, and I use a translator to help me translate the chapters.
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