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2024-04-10 17:24

The story is really interesting and I'm hooked. The writing & grammar is done well with a few exceptions here & there. Author, please stop using the word "prolly" instead of "probably" which is grammatically better, prolly sounds too much like slang. Also you have Aiden graping her instead of raping or groping, I'm not 100% sure which you meant. But I couldn't help smiling picturing Aiden forcing grapes on her. 😂 Your writing is really good & with a few grammatical & typo corrections I believe your story will be even better, especially if you enter it into any of the writing contests here or elsewhere if your not already contracted here. I'm excited to read more.

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