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Onion_lover
Onion_loverLv41yr
2024-01-26 04:33

idk about this one tbh. the story seems to have potential but the author just used over the top vocabulary. it seems like chatgpt definitely took a part in writing some of those scenes since the verbs especially are just too much. it’s hard to explain but you will get it if you read like a single chapter

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That is what happens when the editor you've paid does lazy work.

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Lintiun8
Lintiun8Lv13

4 stars. To be honest, this novel is a good read, so why 4 stars? Well, the chapters have foreshadowing like "little did they know" "unbeknownst" etc. And while it's not bad to have some, we have this on the majority of the chapters, making it annoying to read. What's more? The characters, i saw a comment saying that the system was a horrible character and i thought i wouldn't like, but then i read the author saying she would be funny to read and would get a better attitude with time. Well, she didn't. She is the worst character in this novel without any doubts, like really, i dropped because of it, so if you don't like a sentient system, this is not your cup of tea. Not only her (it's a feminine system), we have the mc which is very plain, when a character is good, i sympathize or antagonize with him, with this mc neither of them happened, for me it was just some another character from the background, like meh, whatever if he dies or not. The writing style while its good, it has some flaws, one of the being the excessive foreshadowing and seems it has some type of AI helping the author, idk, because sometimes you read a paragraph that it makes you feel like you asked something to chatgpt and he answered like what you just read. What really carries this story and that's why i gave 4 stars to it is: The story and world background. The author nailed this part, i got fully immersed wanting to discover more of every single part of this world and the mysteries that it has and what will happen to it. Not only that, but the number of free chapters are really good too. Unfortunately, i dropped, i couldn't get past a specific part where it has a forced plot from the author where the system just basically takes advantage of the mc and his points because of a stupid reasoning that doesn't make any sense, then i dropped. But, if you get past of it, i think that with time the author will learn from his mistakes and deliver a good story for the readers.

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