Review Detail of Vladarius in The Dragon Warrior.
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I would like to start off that I only read up until chapter 5, so take this review with a grain of salt, and I will be mostly focusing on the main character/writing quality. The two main issues I noticed right off the bat is the fact that the character adapted to his circumstances extremely quickly. and the pacing of the story is over the roof, and to be quite fair. It makes no sense. As a thirteen year old child people would expect them to be full of questions and have issues adapting, but instead we see him act like an adult and make rational and extremely unlike choices for a child. This makes no sense considering he just woke up and after an hour of him living his new life he already realized he is in the karate kid/cobra kai world. His interaction with his father is also forceful, but that might be because of his strained relationship with his parents. The pacing makes the unnatural adaptation of the child even worse, and adding another layer of doubt towards the novels progression. Since the pacing and character are so bad it is starting to affect the story development since chapter 5, and making the development less competent. basically we are rushing to build the house and forgot to reinforce the foundation, this will create plothole which leads to dissatisfaction. World Background is 5*, cuz its a fanfiction held inside an already popular series. Updates is 5*. lots of chapters and a really responsive author. good overall
The Dragon Warrior.
SrCuervo
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I know you invite me to read, since its your novel, and I appreciate the offer but I have to politely decline.
SrCuervo:If you read chapter 80, your review completely changes, I invite you to read it.
That's the problem with giving a review based on 5 chapters of the novel, the protagonist doesn't adapt to the world too quickly. The adaptation process is the entire first volume. If you mention that he is rational, intelligent and acts like an adult, believe me there are similar children and I say this from my own experience. He had to adapt to the circumstances of his life literally alone, he spoke most of his life with adults until the moment of his death, so he is not a normal child. Life prepares us for different circumstances in life, I have come across ten-year-old children from who are extremely mature, perceptive, intelligent and with a large vocabulary. I don't know what else to say about your disappointments, I hope you understand this and understand the protagonist more.
I appreciate your opinion and I know that there are certain cases, not all the time, but there are. The pacing is still quite quick which I'm pretty sure has been improved on in later chapters, but just as your reply and my review have value. The problem with the entire review is that it's based on first impressions. Which are usually crucial for the growth of a novel. Call me shallow, but I stand by the fact that the way you introduced us to the character and the pacing are extremely fast. I respect the fact that at least you took the time to read my review. Have a nice time writing, Sir Author.
SrCuervo:That's the problem with giving a review based on 5 chapters of the novel, the protagonist doesn't adapt to the world too quickly. The adaptation process is the entire first volume. If you mention that he is rational, intelligent and acts like an adult, believe me there are similar children and I say this from my own experience. He had to adapt to the circumstances of his life literally alone, he spoke most of his life with adults until the moment of his death, so he is not a normal child. Life prepares us for different circumstances in life, I have come across ten-year-old children from who are extremely mature, perceptive, intelligent and with a large vocabulary. I don't know what else to say about your disappointments, I hope you understand this and understand the protagonist more.image