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2024-08-19 13:27

Ill start off by saying that im not terribly far in the story thus far. The premise, world, and characters have alot of potential in my opinion. I like alot of the dialogue so far, and it seems to be heading in a good direction. Unfortunately, I feel like the pacing is not great. Character relationships develop abnormally quickly, certain, seemingly, major character developments and reveals sort of just happen. Plot points come at you really quickly. I imiagine the author is eager to get into the meat of the story and has plans for where to go, which I like very much. However, I feel as though it comes at the expense of meaningful character development. The beginning exposition is extremely important. I think its worth giving a read to see if its your cup of tea, and I think its entirely possible some of these issues can be straightened out as the story continues. I will say I have been enjoying it, putting aside the aforementioned issues.

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Katanexy
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Thanks for the review - That said, I know there are a lot of problems with the work, (so much so that I basically reset it after 110, despite frustrating 70% of my audience). This was my first novel, I had no idea what to do or how to continue. But I guarantee that all the problems will start to be solved in the future, between volumes 3 and 4. Thanks for the review again!

Warden_ix
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Glad to hear it, like I said, I think the setting and characters have a ton of potential. Im looking forward to see how it goes moving forward.

Katanexy:Thanks for the review - That said, I know there are a lot of problems with the work, (so much so that I basically reset it after 110, despite frustrating 70% of my audience). This was my first novel, I had no idea what to do or how to continue. But I guarantee that all the problems will start to be solved in the future, between volumes 3 and 4. Thanks for the review again!
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