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TaleDrifter
TaleDrifterAuthor1yr
2023-12-09 21:52

Hey, Author here with a shameless 5 star review for himself. If you haven't guessed already this is a novel about our MC reincarnating as Sasuke just after experiencing the Uchiha Massacre. The chapters probably seem quite small... well they are. Usually hovering around ~700 words, I've tried making the chapters longer but the quality just drops by a disgusting amount. I mean, I am constantly editing these chapters, so who knows if they could become longer in the future. However, future chapters should probably be between 1000-1500 words as there will be a lot more to write about there. Also, this is my first ever Webnovel. So I would really appreciate it if you guys help point out things like plot-holes, lacking character development, too many info dumps etc.

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hero4hire
hero4hireLv11

While this seems to have good start and interesting story, i have a pet peeve about author introudcting their own random BS into the story completely unrelated to the story. - Either its random otutsuki book in library, - Never before seen 4th sage land banish by hyporitical toads, - Sapling of the god tree that nobdy ever found, - Portal to underworld demon land, - Shringan with 5 or 10 tomoe etc...etc.. It never goes well and gives the impression that author is lacking the annon knowedge and making up random bs instead of doing proper research. Anyway, good luck with your novle if you want to go in that diretion but its not for me.

TaleDrifter
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That's fine, everyone has their reading preferences. But I can see where you are coming from, there are a lot of fanfics where there are some random changes in the story simply to add to the MC's harem, make him look cooler or make him even more op than he already is. I'm trying to change it more logically, in the future of the novel I'll be explaining slowly how and why things have deviated from the original story. Anyway, thanks for at least trying to read the story even if it didn't suit your taste.

hero4hire:While this seems to have good start and interesting story, i have a pet peeve about author introudcting their own random BS into the story completely unrelated to the story. - Either its random otutsuki book in library, - Never before seen 4th sage land banish by hyporitical toads, - Sapling of the god tree that nobdy ever found, - Portal to underworld demon land, - Shringan with 5 or 10 tomoe etc...etc.. It never goes well and gives the impression that author is lacking the annon knowedge and making up random bs instead of doing proper research. Anyway, good luck with your novle if you want to go in that diretion but its not for me.
hero4hire
hero4hireLv11

Yea, just because its my pet peeve doesnt mean its a bad novel. That's why i didnt post it was a reivew since i dont wanna affect your score with my personal bias. Good luck with your writing 👍

TaleDrifter:That's fine, everyone has their reading preferences. But I can see where you are coming from, there are a lot of fanfics where there are some random changes in the story simply to add to the MC's harem, make him look cooler or make him even more op than he already is. I'm trying to change it more logically, in the future of the novel I'll be explaining slowly how and why things have deviated from the original story. Anyway, thanks for at least trying to read the story even if it didn't suit your taste.
hoifzf
hoifzfLv4

love that enthusiasm comrade :)

Santhosh_B
Santhosh_BLv4

if you added a heram

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