I will say as a pure football novel, this is very good but regarding MC's childhood/schooldays/teenage years we know nothing except the football matches he played. This makes the story like very fast paced and jumping from one match to another. There are casual chapters too later like the FMC introduction but author says that he will make MC breakup with 2-3 girls and maybe make him marry another different girl which i didn't like. If he finds the right person then he should stay with her why try to change FMC just to make it realistic. MC lived in that world from as a toddler but he only streams Fortnite like i don't want it to be totally business related but he could do tons of things in those 'time-skips' other than football too.

you don't describe the match. There is no suspense in the match. Characters are bland.Its seems like I am reading something written by A.I. And for the match description, try to read some football related novel.Learn how they describe it. And for a football novel it quite fast paced.

First of all, I'm not a soccer fan so I had to pause to look for references to players and movements they make in games. After that the pace of the novel is good but we know almost nothing about his world, practically non-existent childhood, only directly to match / training / match / training, for example now he is 15 years old but he still goes to school? It's just these last chapters where we see that he seems to have a life

Even though the chapters are short they are sill very good. One of the best football fanfics there is if not the best. 10/10 keep up the good work 😎

i got to chapter 20 roughly.. maybe it gets better after his formative years but right now, every chapter is you just saying what game mc is playing and then telling us the end result. you havent actually written a full game. its like reading the wiki of a players track record. idk again, maybe it gets better but i cbf after 20 chapters.

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Pretty good footbal novel, curious where this goes.

I see if you tell me that the hero is confronted with deliberate attempts to injure him during a match. merci d'avance cher ami, nous allons lire a fond

Amazing book its not the best but it is a good wish fullfillment book

Мне очень нравится ваше произведения развитие персонаже просто бомба надеюсь так и продолжится. Жду продолжения етого гениально произведения.