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harsh07
harsh07Author1yr
2023-12-09 23:05

I've corrected Chapters 1 to 11 today changed the name of Uziki Xiyan to Uzuki Yugao Please suggest what more improvement I can make I'll do that

I dispose Corpses In Konoha

harsh07
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DvD_007
DvD_007Lv5

change name of the villages too, thunder kingdom sounds dumb. also dignified to serious. there's lots of little things that make the story sound Chinese, but for that you'd have to do complete revision on the chapters. Its up to you if you want to do that. I'd say do it but it's gonna take you more time to release a chapter if you do decide to edit it so that it doesn't have that weird Chinese way of talking

1yr
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Rizki_Caturianto
Rizki_CaturiantoLv1

There's improvement for a few first chapter author san.. But there still many Chinese name (like Moonlight Hayate, should be Gekkou Hayate, Uzuki Yugao still wrong I think, etc)

1yr
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harsh07
harsh07Author

Uzuki Yugao is her real name in Naruto

Rizki_Caturianto:There's improvement for a few first chapter author san.. But there still many Chinese name (like Moonlight Hayate, should be Gekkou Hayate, Uzuki Yugao still wrong I think, etc)
1yr
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GodOfLight
GodOfLightLv1

It's a pretty good fanfic, but you can do better in the translation. First you can use 'Grammarly' to check out things, and then you can use 'ChatGPT' to find the wrong names easily. All of them are free, and it takes seconds to do, making your translations a little bit better. Continue your work and search for softwares that can help you doing it more easily and in no time you will get more readers and hopefully earn some cash.

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Rizki_Caturianto
Rizki_CaturiantoLv1

It's really great and interesting Naruto fanfiction!!! I love it!! 😍😍 It have a great plot/storyline and good english/translation.. The grammar is good too 👍 I like the idea of system corpse point, it's interesting to see he get point from destroy/decomposed corpse.. I don't mind an op MC (although he doesn't how strong he is after 3 years he got the system).. I also don't mind how cautious MC is (many say he's coward because he always fighting with a clone, and he only come after fight is over.. But I think he's smart and overly cautious, although he's not to do so now, his wood clone can hold again Raikage and Tsuchikage).. I hope MC/Natsu can become Hokage (and maybe kill Danzo, the two conselor/elders, and Sarutobi).. Konoha need new hokage/blood to change and make Konoha great again (especially kill Danzo) Love your story author san.. Keep up the great work 😁👍😍😍😍

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AphoomZhah
AphoomZhahLv4

Reveal spoiler

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CarefeeDaoist
CarefeeDaoistLv15

In fact no corrections were made the grammar is still terrible

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Darius_Chromwell
Darius_ChromwellLv5

I don’t even know what I’m reading anymore [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

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kibishi718
kibishi718Lv2

Don't leave this midway and continue to upload the story is good to read and I like slice-of-life stories in which MC gets stronger silently and fast 😊😊💙

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hero4hire
hero4hireLv11

Just one question: why are they disposing corpses of enemy ninjas without:- Yamanaka mind reading trading it back for their own comrades corpse after the war Studing kekei gankai or other things Giving it to medical or scientific department I feel like ninja won't do something like this especially to S rank enemies whose bodies hide alot of secrets.

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_Harsh_
_Harsh_Lv14

L translation with all the Chinese names and phrases

1yr
harsh07
harsh07Author

Updated all the previous chapters today and changed some names .......................................................................................................................

1yr
harsh07
harsh07Author

I'm going to correct the grammar and other things in all the chapters and it will be completed in 2 or 3 days What I want to ask is if should I change the names of the characters too

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