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DRACULAVONDEATH
DRACULAVONDEATHLv131yr
2023-12-08 23:45

The author wanted a honest review so first things first, there are times then sentences repeats themselves, there were a few Instances then I got confused but the next chaps cleared It up, next are the first person perspective, I also write from first person perspective then It Involves the MC but I never do that from other characters, the first time I got confused then reading from another characters perspective I think It would be better If you wrote whose perspective It Is, then you change perspectives, personally I would have written chap 6 and 7 before Elenore got Into the carriage because as a reader after reading that I chap I already know what happened so reading It again from another characters perspective makes It a bit annoying despite my criticism I can tell that the author Is trying their best so give It a read maybe this book you're cup of tea, P.S. I wasn't trying to degrade the book or anything I just gave an honest review from a readers perspective because the Author asked me to.

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your the best 😍. it hurt 🤕 a little but I really need someone to tell me my mistakes [img=recommend]

DRACULAVONDEATH
DRACULAVONDEATHLv13

well you asked for It😅 but then again It's just my subjective opinion we all have our tastes, I bet if you could find so many points to criticize In my novel that I'd probably have a heart attack anyways no ones perfect It's all about experience

Reveries_:your the best 😍. it hurt 🤕 a little but I really need someone to tell me my mistakes [img=recommend]
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first I read your novel and 😞 I like it and I couldn't find something 😭. well maybe 🤔 I will read again and and you know [img=proud] 🤣

DRACULAVONDEATH:well you asked for It😅 but then again It's just my subjective opinion we all have our tastes, I bet if you could find so many points to criticize In my novel that I'd probably have a heart attack anyways no ones perfect It's all about experience
DRACULAVONDEATH
DRACULAVONDEATHLv13

🦾yes criticism Is the best

Reveries_:first I read your novel and 😞 I like it and I couldn't find something 😭. well maybe 🤔 I will read again and and you know [img=proud] 🤣
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Reveries_Author

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DRACULAVONDEATH:🦾yes criticism Is the best
Sweet_Yummy
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nice❤️

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vervainiasi
vervainiasiLv15

After reading all the available chapters, I can say the author has a good vision and development for this world. It's an interesting story, though the pacing is a bit unstable. We tend to jump from one point to another without ever really concluding anything. We get a breakfast scene with a fight, followed by a kissing scene that was 3 days later? Then a torture interrogation, I'm not sure where exactly it is in the timeline but the torture interrogation is sprinkled throughout. Then some exposition about witches. What is our FL doing? No idea sleeping and sobbing I suppose. She doesn't seem to do much to try and work through her situation. I get the shock, denial, and confusion, but it's been a while and some of the processing should be done. I'm not asking for much just some progress for our FL. I do enjoy the characters although I wish the author would put the descriptions either in the comments or the author's notes since putting them in the chapter just runs up the word count and cost. However, there is a glaring issue with the lack of proofreading before being published. Words are misspelled, characters are misnamed, sentences are repeated, and phrases that are used are clunky. I was considering reporting all of the mistakes but that would honestly take up more time than just reading the novel. I do enjoy the world and mysteries being uncovered.Overall, I am ambivalent about our FL as she seems kind of useless for everything except crying and picking fights. The ML seems interesting, as does the rest of the cast. I look forward to their stories gradually being revealed. I assume this is the authors' first work since there are so many ideas expressed in such a short time, rather than gradually being revealed as their own independent arc. It's a good concept, I just hope for some streamlining, and proofreading in the future. I look forward to what the Author does in the future.

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