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Review Detail of DarkestCalling in Game of Thrones: The Legend of Jon Arctic – ASOIAF/GOT GOT

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Honestly I really wanted to like this story sure it might have quickly become a op wish fulfillment story but it was interesting and had alot of potential but the authors writing style and skill quickly dragged my interest to a river and drowned it without any remorse or attempt to change my mind so let's break it down Writing Quality: 1⭐ honestly this is a shame cause author doesn't have any major issues here except in to major glaring areas 1 word filler dear god the word filler almost every chapter be it 2k words to 5k almost consistently is it completely filled with over the top thick verbose flowery and repetitive wording Jon building a city? 3 times in one chapter will he repeat about them all coming together to build it and how they come to respect understand and value one another etc etc then there will be mentions of everyone working together at least once more every chapter dear god 2 dear god the amount of talent the author has to use said word filler to say nothing at all insert talking strategy? 500 descriptive words highlight determination resolve etc etc insert intricate and meticulous planning then battle which is honestly at least decent for a fight scene City planning with the dwarves ? basically boils down to Jon saying I want it big sturdy long lasting and ecologically sustainable dwarves? eat it up like he just spat advanced engineering intricate city planning and detailed plans to make it environmentally friendly and inclusive including blueprints and diagrams all while all he said was sturdy strong long lasting and sustainable it's ridiculous Story Development: 2 ⭐ I honestly don't really know how to put it but development wise my biggest issue is how everything is just working basically cause author says so theres so many areas of plot holes or bad description of dialogue where it just seems to work out also I really wanted to give a 1 star here just cause of how salty I am of garbage filler I choked down hoping this story got better and the last several chapters of thousands and thousands of word filler just to get minimal description of plot progress has me feeling some kind of way Character Design: 2 ⭐I don't really know how to put this but all the characters basically feel like 1 dimensional there's no real true character interaction and depth past the start of the story in the beginning it was better but as it progressed they just feel hollow and bland Updating Stability: 3⭐I give it 3 stars because for the most part it's regularly updated I took 1 star cause there isn't a schedule and 1 more cause there were a few times it stalled and I'm salty enough about reading a new chapter with thousands of words and only getting like 500 maybe 1000 of actual chapter Overall I would not recommend the more I read the more annoyed I got each new chapter the filler is one thing but it's like the further author got into the story the less he tried to actually give details it's one thing if I have to skim but it's a completely different ballgame when it amounts to vaguely saying alot describing little honestly if someone rewrote this and slashed roughly 1/2 - 2/3 of the story just getting rid of the filler it would be far more entertaining

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Game of Thrones: The Legend of Jon Arctic – ASOIAF/GOT GOT

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