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2023-12-01 08:18

Okay, in terms of writing, everything is quite good. The sentences are very diverse, so it doesn't get too boring to read. The writing style is well-organized, although there are some parts that could be improved. The depiction of events, locations, and settings is well-written. However, what might make this novel less appealing is the slow pace in finding calming or WOW scenes, and perhaps you could promote your novel more. Because in terms of writing quality, it's already good. Keep writing this novel and strive to improve!

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Raphis
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Sorry, I haven't read it entirely yet, so I'll add it to my collection list.

ToufiqUlAlam
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thank you. This novel will take time to unfold on various fronts and then slowly close. This journey will be epic. I hope you follow the book and enjoy.

Madara_Uchiha_6218
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Hey raphis, I'm sorry for the apocalypse novel. it was bad I have posted a new novel. I just wanted you to know, it's called Global Survival: 100xReward

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