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SkyfailLv151yr
2023-12-04 06:58

Very promising so far. As expected of something inspired by Greed. You did a good job by making it different enough. World building seems interesting but we don't know enough yet. The spelling mistakes seem to get less and less. Some parts definitely sound weird so there's room for improvement. The only problem I have so far are about that Gu Teng and Shi Liang and Shi Hengshan or however they were called. They seemed more like teenagers instead of 400 year old geniuses of some great clan. I guess they are rather young in the grand scheme but in my opinion their clans are doomed if that's some of the best fresh blood they have.Anyways keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to when the action starts.

Rise Of The Primordial Devourer

Primordial_Devour
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Primordial_Devour
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It’s only right to rate my own novel 5 stars. Right now the novel might not seem great but the real action will begin later. Just give it a try!

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Supreme_IQ
Supreme_IQLv4

A good plot story which could definitely be improved on. Keep reading and learning author, and don't forget to always take in fresh perspectives.

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Supremeking92
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This novels has lots of potential, I hope the author doesn’t drop it too soon like most new authors do. I can’t too much about the world building because it’s too early to judge. However the author created a mini arch to introduce the Mc and how he handles things, showing that the MC is smart and manipulative, and he would do anything to get what he wants. As for the writing quality… it’s ok, I can understand that the author must have recently started to upload his story, I hope the author improves his writing quality as he uploads.

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Raphis
RaphisLv3

"You do a good job in portraying the chaotic world of Azreak. The way you describe tragedy and conflict is easily understandable and quite acceptable. I also like the main character's nature; they are calm and act impulsively. However, in action, it's still lacking in epic and thrilling moments. But perhaps it's because there are still only a few chapters. Overall, it's tidy and good."

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Monarch_Lord
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A hidden gem for sure ( always wanted to say that keke ) The novel is really good, the backstory before the mc reincarnates is very cool as it allows us to understand his personality more, and the story flows really well too. Definitely shouldn't miss out on this!!

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ArkonKnight
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It’s very good it’s kept me entertained and is interesting the world building is solid the mc has a good past to get to know him a little. Im thankful this is not a gotta catch them all harem. Please don’t drop this I think you have a lot of potential in this novel🙏.

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Janis_Jeplin
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i love evil mc, gambatte autor-san. please don´t leave the novel. ;D

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