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MagicianMiracle
MagicianMiracleLv41yr
2023-11-04 03:47

author did u really use an AI to write this because it seems like it ._. hmmm

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YourRaven
YourRavenAuthor

I would very much appreciate it, if instead of writing a review to call me out on using AI. you could instead write a comprehensive review on how I could make a better Fanfic.Thanks for the Review though 😃

MagicianMiracle
MagicianMiracleLv4

here's an advice use AI to fix minor stuff like grammar, not to write an entire story

YourRaven:I would very much appreciate it, if instead of writing a review to call me out on using AI. you could instead write a comprehensive review on how I could make a better Fanfic.Thanks for the Review though 😃
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MagicianMiracle
MagicianMiracleLv4

also, the way u use the Ai makes it so the chapters are in narrative which makes it have time skips or makes the characters look forced when talking like with ikora,zavala, and cayde at that point they are just talking like npc and they don't feel alive also the MC feels so forced when he says something basically all the problems u have here is because of the AI

YourRaven:I would very much appreciate it, if instead of writing a review to call me out on using AI. you could instead write a comprehensive review on how I could make a better Fanfic.Thanks for the Review though 😃
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YourRaven
YourRavenAuthor

I see, thank you for pointing those out i will endeavor to try and improve upon those things. sad to say this but unfortunately most if not all the things you've read in Volume 2 is mostly my writing with barely any AI aside from sentence structure and having it expound on the world currently around Odin. I'll try and improve with the interactions my characters have. 👍🏼

MagicianMiracle:also, the way u use the Ai makes it so the chapters are in narrative which makes it have time skips or makes the characters look forced when talking like with ikora,zavala, and cayde at that point they are just talking like npc and they don't feel alive also the MC feels so forced when he says something basically all the problems u have here is because of the AI
YourRaven
YourRavenAuthor

I don't know if this is a sarcastic comment or an actual sincere recommendation. so I'll say this either way. I apologize if my comment to your review was taken as aggressive or confrontational, I sincerely Hope you a wonderful day. I appreciate your advice Thank you ☺️

MagicianMiracle:here's an advice use AI to fix minor stuff like grammar, not to write an entire story
MagicianMiracle
MagicianMiracleLv4

nah advice because I did the same to write a fanfic for myself lol

YourRaven:I don't know if this is a sarcastic comment or an actual sincere recommendation. so I'll say this either way. I apologize if my comment to your review was taken as aggressive or confrontational, I sincerely Hope you a wonderful day. I appreciate your advice Thank you ☺️
MagicianMiracle
MagicianMiracleLv4

hmm I see, so there not much use of an ai in the 2nd part, so yeah u need work on the interactions of the characters

YourRaven:I see, thank you for pointing those out i will endeavor to try and improve upon those things. sad to say this but unfortunately most if not all the things you've read in Volume 2 is mostly my writing with barely any AI aside from sentence structure and having it expound on the world currently around Odin. I'll try and improve with the interactions my characters have. 👍🏼
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MakiMakiTaki
MakiMakiTakiLv1

I'm new to this app and just recently migrated from 'Fanfiction' and just got into reading some of the fanfics in Webnovel. Here are my honest thoughts on this fanfic.1. The start, more specifically the first volume was way too quick and mostly just a quick rundown in a narrative point of view. while it was slowly improving by chapters it ended before it could really get better. I hope the Author could somehow someway go back to HSR.2. The second Volume on the other hand had drastic change of writing quality in a good way. chapters were noticeably longer, we got PoV for Odin and way more Monologue's and Dialogues's.3. The Author has a very good grasp on the existing characters in the game Destiny. the interaction between The books Protagonist and characters like Cayde and Banshee seemed true to how the original creators portrayed their characters.4. I didn't really like how some entities just know about The Main Character somehow but it's understandable since the entities that know are like that universes God/Similar being. and fortunately only really mentioned at the very bare minimum, so I Could get past my dislike for it.5. liked how there were no wishes/blessings/system that the MC got (Overdone in my Opinion)6. The MC's interaction with the world around him was interesting and believable to me at least.Overall I think it was pretty good if you could get past Their earlier chapters.P.S: to author it might be better for you to just remove the HSR Volume entirely and make it a Destiny The Game Fanfic at the start. but that's just me.

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