Review Detail of MrIIIo in Demon Slayer: I love Stars

so the story is pretty good, Author made a few small changes to the KNY world like how the demon slayers are more well known instead of seen as fables, which i really like. The breathing style is also very unique and has some cool techniques. I also dont remember coming across any grammatical errors which makes it more fluent to read. The things i find lacking are the lack of story development and character interactions. The story has a lot of timeskips, for example the mc went to train at the Rengoku's for 4 years and kyojuro even sees him as his own brother, but we have barely seen the interract, grow a bond or anything. Like some people say "show instead of tell" write the situations out, dont just summarize what happened and then skip ahead. Appearantly the mc and a group went on a search for the 2nd upper moon, only thing we know about it was that Kanae was taken by the 2nd(this was summarized), mc perhaps had feelings for her and he found her while she was dying. (there was a time skip and it was when mc found her, none of the other details of the search). The author could have added more missions and co-op missions with other slayers but instead just puts timeskips there which i find very unfortunate. Perhaps it is because he wants to quickly get to the canon timeline or due to inexperience, but a lot of potential was wasted due to skimming through the mc's experience. My advice would be to try putting less timeskips in the story and to write more character interactions.