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2023-11-22 08:39

Смог дочитать только до 9 главы. Развитие событий плохое. Вся идея попаданца в том что бы он был главным героем. Если вы развиваете персонаж, а потом внезапно добавляете еще одного, у которого КРУЧЕ способности, просто потому что! Это делает всю историю плохой. если вы добавили это только для лимонов то идея плоха. Этот чит должен был быть у Тен тен, тогда и секс со случайными мальчиками было бы приемлемым, раз уж вы так позиционируете своего персонажа, но то как движется история меня напрягло. Наруто и так супер сильный без дополнительных сил... И делать фанфик про второстепенного персонажа круто, но зачем этот поворот сюжета...эх...

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