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BrazillianFox
BrazillianFoxLv41yr
2023-10-22 16:04

Being quite honest, I almost have an aneurysm reading this, the story is so rushed that I can't enjoy it, there are too many holes, like him unlocking his power and no one sensing it... in Tokyo which is literally the base of jujutsu in Japan. Or the MC acting like an idiot adult even though he is 4 years old and everything is fine (great sage or not it would be easy for someone to discover something wrong with him) and him literally creating a sword style out of thin air (parallel and quick thinking are no excuse) when he has never used a sword before, thinking 1000 times allows someone to learn much faster, but not to the extent that the author describes because many of the great sage's skills only work because Rimuru has skills to complement them... in short, the story is very poorly written, with a strange development that makes him super powerful from the start because... I don't see any beneficial development in this story

The Phoenix of Jujutsu Kaisen

Shadow_D_Monarch3
4.1
106 Chs

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Income_Tax
Income_TaxLv4

thanks for saving me from this potential time waster

1yr
21
Fryandika_Larung
Fryandika_LarungLv4

thank you for your sacrifice so i don't have to read this

1yr
20
DaoistgD2KUM
DaoistgD2KUMLv1

Je to dobrý příběh a to že se ti nelíbil by autora zajímat nemuselo

1yr
3
Herohero
HeroheroLv4

Thank you since your sacrifice saved me

1yr
8
Arnab_Panday
Arnab_PandayLv2

Give the author some slack man. He is a new author. Do you expect him to write good from the start! He will be better in the future. Look at his second fanfic, it's better than the first one.

1yr
4
Fernizer
FernizerLv14

It is one thing to 'give him some slack' and the other is to ignore the problems. In 50 something chapters I read I didn't see any significant improvement in grammar, plot or overall reading experience, so I would say BrazillianFox may be a bit harsh, but that is more or less true.

Arnab_Panday:Give the author some slack man. He is a new author. Do you expect him to write good from the start! He will be better in the future. Look at his second fanfic, it's better than the first one.
1yr
10
Arnab_Panday
Arnab_PandayLv2

I am not denying it. I, myself have only managed to read up to 7th chapter then dropped it. I am just saying that his second fanfic is better than this one. So, you see a improvement there.

Fernizer:It is one thing to 'give him some slack' and the other is to ignore the problems. In 50 something chapters I read I didn't see any significant improvement in grammar, plot or overall reading experience, so I would say BrazillianFox may be a bit harsh, but that is more or less true.
1yr
1
Mac_Laurin_AGBONON
Mac_Laurin_AGBONONLv1

Eu gostei.

1yr
1
Honoured_Writer
Honoured_WriterLv4

Who cares about that though

Arnab_Panday:I am not denying it. I, myself have only managed to read up to 7th chapter then dropped it. I am just saying that his second fanfic is better than this one. So, you see a improvement there.
1yr
4
masterkiritojj
masterkiritojjLv2

Harem or noharem?

5mth
1
AlastorGF
AlastorGFLv1

Ojalá me hubiera tomado la molestia de ver los comentarios me hubiera salvado de leer basura

5mth
Other Reviews
Fernizer
FernizerLv14

It's bad. Rushed-kind of bad. Not thought through. Lots of mistakes were made, both grammar punctuation mistakes, and I didn't see any improvement over the course of more than 50 chapters. They were, more or less bad. Other thing is, author followed plot with only minimal changes, like someone on Satoru Gojo's level being born wouldn't change some things, like adding new characters or killing some others. I didn't see that change, it didn't make any sense for so many things to stay exactly the same, so I can't really ignore all those problems just because plot is interesting. Because it is not. It is not exactly bad for a new writer, but I wouldn't really recommend this one. 4/10 if I were being honest, maybe 5 if I were really generous.

1yr

DaoistjkYosT
DaoistjkYosTLv4

To be honest, MC's design and character are so poorly written. He behaves like an idiot and takes nothing seriously. No person with a soul of 19 years should behave like this unless he is just a delinquent. I have seen my fair share of poorly designed characters but this just takes the cake... In short, this story is a total waste of time.

1yr
Haku_Ouroboros
Haku_OuroborosLv12

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1yr
VERMITHOR
VERMITHORLv13

who is gonna be the waifu.more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter more chapter

1yr
Arnab_Panday
Arnab_PandayLv2

Well, what can I say? It's bad. I got to stop five times just to read up to 7th chapter. And I also skipped a few times in the middle. But his second work is decent.

1yr
Rimuru_2412
Rimuru_2412Lv13

la neta no se porque leí esta mierda, si te gustan los personajes estilo chino puede que tegusten no esuq la historia se china pero el comportamiento del prota tan pendejo solo me recuerda a los protas chinos ( al 99% por que hay algunos buenos) decepción de historia no la recomiendo

8mth
Maximus_Duke
Maximus_DukeLv3

The writing quality is absolute garbage from grammar to spelling and even what's happening in the story is completely inconsistent. I'm hoping this gets better as the authors other stories are good but they really need to edit this one.

1yr
Victor_7740
Victor_7740Lv14

I love this fic don’t have much complaining to do so just gonna spam s to fill up the space required ssssssssssssss

1yr
AppleBacon
AppleBaconLv3

Its actually pretty good, at least plot wise it's good. The writing can use some work but I like it either way. I'd give it a shot. .................................................................................................................

1yr
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