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Natsupatsu
NatsupatsuLv131yr
2023-11-16 06:42

at the start, I really liked this story, but after a lackluster story development and a shoddy update, stability I might drop this story.

BEING RE-WRITTEN!!

Heavenmonarch_
4.4
1 Chs

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Heavenmonarch_
Heavenmonarch_Author

Could you elaborate more about the lackluster story development

1yr
RegalObscure
RegalObscureLv4

Your pacing is horrible, dialogue is made by AI, romance is absolute atrocious. MC is unlikeable and his family dynamics is forced and robot like. Your jokes falls flat on delivery.

1yr
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Heavenmonarch_
Heavenmonarch_Author

Being honest, I probably just wrote this because I was bored, but for all it’s worth, I guarantee that this is one of the best football (or soccer, whatever you’re used to) fictions that you’ll ever see. This book is very different when compared to most of the other books that I’ve written, being that everything doesn’t happen in some sort of fantasy world or something. There will be romance really early on in the book, for those of you that would like that although there will be NO form of harem. If there’s more then I’ll provide an update. Happy reading!

1yr

QuaziY
QuaziYLv4

What is the story about? video game character in FIFA/PES? if he gets any skill it should assimilate with his body and brain. improve his stats and game intelligence. it should be like he practiced it for a long time. in this story he uses skills like he's using a controller to play. and he acts like he's playing street football. and author says that it's one of the best football novel there! I think author's research is based on virtual game like FIFA/PES.

1yr
EliteMasky
EliteMaskyLv4

Great start for the book, waiting for more chapters to be released.

1yr
MrHaogo
MrHaogoLv4

This is something you know is just destined for greatness! Good luck bro

1yr
LGK_maore
LGK_maoreLv4

good job author keep going ...i like the description so take 5stars 🤭🤭🤭

1yr
Lons
LonsLv4

love how you wrote this can't wait dor more chapter's😁⚡

1yr
IKECARODEV
IKECARODEVLv1

Just based on fact that the author refers to it as Football rather than Soccer if enough of a sell. The most memorable sports stories basically have powers in them and they always manage to blow my expectations out of the water. The system in this work is no exception.

1yr
Ishant_Tomar
Ishant_TomarLv11

I really like the your artistic approach for system usage and I want to assure you that this work that you just start writing in boredom will carve your career in a positive sense

1yr
ZelretchTheTaoist
ZelretchTheTaoistLv3

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1yr
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