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2024-01-02 04:23

It’s good and the only things that needs work is grammar

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Meliodas in TBATE presents a promising premise by bringing Meliodas, an iconic character, into the world of TBATE. However, despite the potential of this combination, the fanfic fails to fully leverage the opportunity to create a fresh and original narrative. One of the most evident issues is the author’s over-reliance on the original plot of TBATE. Instead of reimagining the world of TBATE with the inclusion of Meliodas, the story follows the events of the original novel almost to the letter, with few significant changes. This lack of originality and creativity makes the story feel like a simple "copy and paste" with the superficial addition of Meliodas and a few secondary characters. While the inclusion of Meliodas is theoretically interesting, it does not integrate organically into the TBATE plot. His presence often feels forced and does not add much to the story’s development. The secondary characters introduced also lack depth and seem to exist solely to justify Meliodas’ inclusion, without truly enriching the narrative. The lack of innovation is especially disappointing given the potential for a well-executed crossover. The interaction between Meliodas and the TBATE characters could have provided unique opportunities to explore new dynamics and conflicts, but these possibilities are inadequately explored. Instead, the author opts to replicate scenes and situations from the original material, making the story feel repetitive and predictable. Additionally, the writing itself has issues. Although the action scenes are occasionally exciting, the overall narrative suffers from grammatical and stylistic errors that distract and hinder immersion in the story. A more careful review and rigorous editing could significantly improve the quality of the text. In summary, Meliodas in TBATE falls short of expectations for an innovative and thrilling crossover. The lack of originality and over-reliance on the TBATE plot make the story feel derivative and uninspired. While die-hard fans of both universes might find some value in seeing their favorite characters interact, the story as a whole fails to offer a fresh and engaging narrative. A thorough revision and a more creative approach are recommended to truly do justice to the crossover premise.

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