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AtlasMagellan
AtlasMagellanLv41yr
2023-11-16 17:21

I like the concept, but the execution is terrible. Way to much over explaining. Lots of sentences can be a lot shorter, and character sentence structure is very badly balanced

jujutsu kaisen's gold experience

nexusstar21
2.4
79 Chs

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Heavenly_Enel
Heavenly_EnelLv14

Then check out my fanfics. Happy Holidays!

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Honoured_Writer
Honoured_WriterLv4

Trash novel dumb decisions terrible dialogue and mc and characters that feel mechanical

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UnenlightenedOne
UnenlightenedOneLv14

too much explanation in dialogues and it feel super robot..its's like characters are obligated to explain everything they do or think

1yr
LastsonofZod
LastsonofZodLv4

The concept is interesting. The execution is beyond terrible. This fanfic is the definitive guide how to not write. A book riddled with plot holes and 'that happened' moments. I feel sad writing such a mean review. Sorry

1yr
EyeOfSauron
EyeOfSauronLv5

mechanical text, inappropriate jumps... basically it's an: "Oh, hi, Ok, bye." all the time. So lifeless that I wouldn't be impressed if they said it was written by an AI.

1yr
Jadeite000
Jadeite000Lv13

He continues to make stupid decisions and it don’t make complete sense on some instances. Sorry for bad review but this is just not that good when it had so much potential.

1yr
King_Cam23
King_Cam23Lv4

Reveal spoiler

1yr
aFreesiaFlower
aFreesiaFlowerLv4

it was an interesting read until the author ruined the only thing that made the mc unique in the jjk world, and on top of that, the quality of the chapters went from decent to unbearable trash

1yr
Drako0692
Drako0692Lv1

The general idea is good but the entire development is horrible, when you finish it you have to do a restructuring. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

1yr
Mundatorem
MundatoremLv4

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