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VenerableShalltear
VenerableShalltearLv141yr
2023-11-19 07:49

Actually quite good but multiple grammar mistakes, spelling mistakes, and simply skipped content completely ruins the experience. It is very unbearable too read because the story itself is very good.

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Black_Domain
Black_DomainLv3

bro why did u make MC with average look, small pp, almost zero talent etc ...Why did Thyron even choose this hellish school in 1st place? he is a weakest looser afterall .... Instructors are all very cruel than any monster and phycopaths... though they are beautiful it will be very dissapointing if he have feelings for them. I hope not... Other male characters are introduced as devilishly handsome with great strength and talent, Our MC is a dissapointment comparing to them... What's the reason of giving him healing trait? are u making him a guinea pig 🐖🐖? Pain addicted macho??... System is useless for not giving him good other skill and traits for strength. Also please add SHOP to system .

RagingArtPunk
RagingArtPunkAuthor

Do you think shop will help ? Moreover, he possess tiger form, demon form, dragon form which has eventually made him handsome and made his pp bigger... If he wanted, he could trasfirmyand use his pp to destroy any pusi he likes...

Black_Domain:bro why did u make MC with average look, small pp, almost zero talent etc ...Why did Thyron even choose this hellish school in 1st place? he is a weakest looser afterall .... Instructors are all very cruel than any monster and phycopaths... though they are beautiful it will be very dissapointing if he have feelings for them. I hope not... Other male characters are introduced as devilishly handsome with great strength and talent, Our MC is a dissapointment comparing to them... What's the reason of giving him healing trait? are u making him a guinea pig 🐖🐖? Pain addicted macho??... System is useless for not giving him good other skill and traits for strength. Also please add SHOP to system .
Black_Domain
Black_DomainLv3

oh, during transformation he could even drill a mountain lol... even so, he need a real complete body rebuild and reborn to increase his charm & his own b parts. I hope author to do something about it...

RagingArtPunk:Do you think shop will help ? Moreover, he possess tiger form, demon form, dragon form which has eventually made him handsome and made his pp bigger... If he wanted, he could trasfirmyand use his pp to destroy any pusi he likes...
Black_Domain
Black_DomainLv3

maybe as he improve and upgrade his genes and cells to a limit, in next system upgrade it provides a reborn function. He will be a devilish handsome lady killer... who knows ..... hehe ..

RagingArtPunk:Do you think shop will help ? Moreover, he possess tiger form, demon form, dragon form which has eventually made him handsome and made his pp bigger... If he wanted, he could trasfirmyand use his pp to destroy any pusi he likes...
hot_papichulo
hot_papichuloLv15

Yoo how many chapters do you plan to write ?? Cuz it seems like there’s sooooo much more to explore and so far I like it. So I’m sorta curious is the story gonna be on the longer side or shorter side ?

RagingArtPunk:Do you think shop will help ? Moreover, he possess tiger form, demon form, dragon form which has eventually made him handsome and made his pp bigger... If he wanted, he could trasfirmyand use his pp to destroy any pusi he likes...
RagingArtPunk
RagingArtPunkAuthor

Longer side ... 1k +

hot_papichulo:Yoo how many chapters do you plan to write ?? Cuz it seems like there’s sooooo much more to explore and so far I like it. So I’m sorta curious is the story gonna be on the longer side or shorter side ?
hot_papichulo
hot_papichuloLv15

Ok ok, appreciate the response. And keep up the good work

RagingArtPunk:Longer side ... 1k +
mystery_anonymous
mystery_anonymousLv3

please read my new novel "The end of world has not yet begun, the system is activated in advance"

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