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JackalVadim
JackalVadimLv111mth
2024-02-17 06:35

I like how the story develops. Usually when a main character becomes too powerful by age 3 (Jonin level or something) it's off-putting, but here it makes sense that he became a seal master at that age (and the desire, and the backstory, and the adult mind, everything leads to this). In other aspects of further development, the main thing is to try not to go too far. A kid who can beat up a kage seems funny. (But the choice of how to develop the story is yours, the author. I'm not asking you to change your story, that's just my opinion). Thanks for your hard work.

a rough story getting a rewrite

cluelessauthor
4.2
34 Chs

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cluelessauthor
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thanks for the review and sharing your opinion!

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ScarletQC
ScarletQCLv14

cluelessauthor:thanks for the review and sharing your opinion!
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cluelessauthor
cluelessauthorAuthor

ah yes, another human from the land of maple syrup

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Adnan_1
Adnan_1Lv4

I'm not a fan of leaving bad reviews, but in this fanfiction, there are too many things that suggest the author has only read or watched a few Naruto episodes or maybe other fanfics. Too many aspects are incorrect (like a 2-year-old creating new fuinjutsu without asking for talent for it and even though that guy might be the talentest talent ever it's a little to much; the portrayal of Hiruzen's character; and the background of the story). I understand that in a fanfic, the author is free to do whatever they want, but there's a limit. Please correct me if I'm wrong, but in this kind of fanfic, what makes it interesting is how the addition of characters changes what we already know, not manipulating the story entirely.

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malhiharjot
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Haha one year able to make ring and negotiate lol ......... Why not 2 year older or younger then kushina, at least try to make little bit believe able. Lol anything .............

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SudoSu
SudoSuLv2

Great naruto fic. MC is an uzumaki so focus is on seals. His 'cheat' is senjutsu ability but it is not outrageous. The plot is not forced and immersive. His powers and seals are cool too. Overall a great fic. I generally wait for many chapters before reviewing but this fic is very good.

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DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv14

A bit early for a review but there isn't a single issue I have with the story so far. Kept me entertained. unique setting and MC. definitely worth it giving this story a read.

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Axion_
Axion_Lv14

Até bom mas não parece Naruto, a qualidade de escrita é boa, eu não gostei do enredo, acho muito florido, isso é Naruto, um mundo cheio de assassinos e pessoas que fazem tudo por interesse próprio, se Kushina, Mito e a "mãe" dele morrerem e ele virar um nukenin ainda tem salvação

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ghostensaop
ghostensaopLv13

Love it

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Vasvikta045
Vasvikta045Lv3

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EmmericH
EmmericHLv13

Excellent at this point, MC has a bit of a cheat but only in the form of it being an ability unique to him, thé fic just feel a bit weird when you remember that at the time when i put this review he is still 2 or 3,i like that it's not a twin story but i feel he should have been at least 2 or 3 years older, and it would have almost perfectly matched with his academy debut in konoha

1yr
Wizardlyllc
WizardlyllcLv13

great series 😁😁😁😁😁😁 but really I only came for kushina and possibly hinata 😎

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