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2023-12-24 23:13

Alright this is a weird one. Honestly writing quality is good it’s just the plot progression is so strange man… characters don’t act as they should sometimes and are strange. He meets character K and immediately asks for them to live with him and his sister, charactwr S who is loyal to his village bends to him very quickly and the whole hyuga talks were so out of character and strange to me. He writes well and there’s good jokes here so if you can look past the plot that sometimes is janky you could have some fun here.

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yeah I got the same feeling.. like he is talking to MPC and BOT that are already programmed to make MC look smart. And everything is very good. Author news to give characters some depth. Try changing pov to different characters and show their views

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