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2024-06-30 16:04

the story is too fast paced, u gave no time for character interactions and world building, your MC has zero personality and u fking forgot that Lee graduated a year early than Naruto and Sasuke , also there's a limit on how much chakra a person can gain , it's possible to train your whole life and not have the ability to use ninjutsu or genjutsu , lee was straight up stated to have a disability that doesn't allow him to use ninjutsu, i wou old have ignored that fact if your writing was good which it isnt ,When I Saw this fanfic I Was hoping to see how well u overcome rock lee disability and surpass the old rock lee but all i saw was disappointment

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